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Final resting place Premiere Contest Winner

Brick by brick I built my walls, despite fires raging, I preserved paths that connected bridges between our breathless existence. Now that my heartbeats have reached a dead end street, let me rest my jaded head upon your chest - for fate has foretold it as my abode to forever sleep. I was the melatonin to your insomnia, you the immunity to internal inflictions. If only I could have drank your infatuation, as a remedy for my antagonising agony. Poetry was only a provisional potion, yet it distracted from all negative notions. We weaved a blanket of words, where you adored the moon in nocturnal notoriety, whilst I portrayed the beauty of sunrise in your eyes. I guess nothing illuminates forever. If this was my last love poem, would you forgive my silence? Would you still bless me in your verses, or let my memories wither like the petals your promised to bloom in our poetic garden? Would I be your last metaphor, in your final spill of tears? Or would you reveal to the world, the greatest unfinished love story. In manipulation of manifestation, I was your willing wordsmith, protecting you with my shield of sanity - in the hope I slayed every demon who desired you. If it was a crime to love you, then I was content as a criminal, awaiting my destiny on death row.

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Date: 12/15/2023 7:31:00 PM
Does your love exist say me ????
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Date: 12/15/2023 7:30:00 PM
Does your love exist say me ????
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Date: 12/8/2023 7:06:00 AM
can't help who you fall in love with..congrats on your top win in the contest!
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Date: 12/7/2023 10:57:00 AM
Dear Silent One, your emotive poem is potent in rich imagery and metaphor and angst. I especially loved "If only I could have drank your infatuation,/as a remedy for my antagonising agony." I think we've all felt the need for that remedy at some time or another. Poetic passion at another level of soulful expression. Subtle rhymes and sparkles of alliteration enhance the emotional beauty spilled upon the page. Congratulations for your excellent trophy win in Ink Empress's contest. Warmest wishes my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 12/7/2023 7:04:00 AM
Again, I'm always amazed at your words. Much love and congratulations on the top win. So happy for you. Love, Gina
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Date: 12/7/2023 6:59:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations, on your contest top win, dear Silent One
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Date: 12/7/2023 6:51:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Your poem is a profound layer of emotions, weaving together the complexities of love and existence with a delicate touch. Congratulations on crafting such an evocative piece that invites the reader to explore the depths of their own heart alongside of you. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 12/7/2023 4:38:00 AM
Big Congrats to win TOP. You are charming every reader with all your poems. From beginning of my entrance to Poetry Soup I am whelmed with your every composition. Blessings always.
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Date: 12/7/2023 3:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/7/2023 1:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Well deserved. I love everything about this. The emotions and flow and the depth of your words truly touched my soul. Thank u for entering my contest
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Date: 12/7/2023 12:46:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win in Empress's contest. Best wishes. Wen
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Date: 11/28/2023 2:48:00 PM
You have such skill in words of passion and love. Amazing such a Romeo with poetic genius, kelli
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Date: 11/25/2023 9:02:00 AM
I don't think it should ever be considered a crime to love someone. Congratulations on your placement.
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Date: 11/24/2023 6:17:00 PM
Very lovely romantic poem! Have a nice day dear lovely poet Silent One, best and warmest wishes ~ AA
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Date: 11/22/2023 3:48:00 AM
'If it was a crime to love you, then I was content as a criminal, awaiting my destiny on death row'. Wow, what a powerful write, those last three lines absolutely nailed it. A fave for me...Hugs
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Date: 11/20/2023 2:55:00 PM
Silent One, you have once again demonstrated your extraordinary talent in this magnificent work. Even if it's fiction, it reveals the fragile spirit entwined with a painful hint of loneliness, a situation you tried to alleviate with your articulate advice, but unfortunately, nobody cared. Nothing can eternally shine with such radiance! But what a wonderful thrill it offers in its splendor!
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Date: 11/20/2023 8:12:00 AM
Oh my... that's such a wonderful poem brother. I loved each and every verse, perfect blend of melancholy and passion of love. I loved that part, "I was the melatonin to your insomnia, you the immunity to internal inflictions. If only I could have drank your infatuation, as a remedy for my antagonising agony." It's just so deeply touching. Slayed every demon who desired you.. ahhh this is so promising. Third last stanza is really emotive, the questions that are too heavy on heart. I am loving this piece so so much Silent One.. I'll sure re-read it many times.. thank you so much for sharing this beauty with us brother!!
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Date: 11/20/2023 7:35:00 AM
The ultimate dead end? And with a bit of Romeo and Juliet thrown in for good measure (stanza 2). But the ultimate triumph is your last stanza. You're only crime? To love her. Exquisite
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Date: 11/19/2023 9:21:00 PM
Death row... only those who know love that grows and grows can complain of that experience. much love to you - this is, as expected, a brilliant part of your light that shines so that inspirations seem to sprout from your thoughts... much love and blessings from above. Happy Thanksgiving. Gina
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Date: 11/19/2023 5:35:00 PM
beautiful and deep metaphor, between love and poetry, poetry as you write is not the goal, well written SO take care
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Date: 11/19/2023 8:46:00 AM
though it is fiction you have revealed the sensitivity of spirit sprinkled with a scent of loneliness that you tried to heal with words of wisdom that fell on deaf ears
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Date: 11/17/2023 6:34:00 PM
Hi Silent ?? this was absolutely beautiful...I decided to start writing again more and come back here...it's been a rough year...I miss writing and definitely miss reading your words.
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Date: 11/17/2023 11:10:00 AM
From the depth of your delirious dance with death, you have once again proven your fantastic ability Silent One! Glad to see this is fictional! I guess nothing illuminates forever! But oh, while it shines bright, what a joy!!
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:57:00 AM
A love that matured yet was destined not to last - Or would you reveal to the world, the greatest unfinished love story.You were content to be a criminal and meet death row, just to have loved her. Great write, but sad, yet poetry sees us through, it is the tool of which we are the master. Hugs and blessings.
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Date: 11/17/2023 6:40:00 AM
Now that my heartbeats have reached a dead end street, let me rest my jaded head upon your chest -for fate has foretold it as my abode to forever sleep--a brilliant depiction of saddened emotions, my friend. A forlorn dialogue resonates through in verses of and disappointment.
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