Final Rambles

Not many would pay attention
Even fewer would care
If I went beyond pretension
And did as I dare

If I let go of ambition
And released my tortured soul
No glory or recognition
Playing the undertaker's role

I wish not any sympathy
For I've created my own hell
Look at me with no empathy
Let no tears leave their trail

In days you'll learn
My presence wasn't vital
You'll carry on with no concern
For this friend once suicidal

My hand clasps tight
Around the grip of this gun
At last, I'll be alright
In a world I'm forever done

The taste of cold steel
With my mind on one track
In  a few seconds a life surreal
No care to turn back

In memory the laughs we had 
The times we would smile
Life wasn't always this bad
But got worse by the mile.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 6/16/2016 7:02:00 PM
Nice to see again, Gary....skat
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Date: 5/29/2014 12:37:00 PM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Gary :) - I choose your first written poem - Well done !! - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/28/2014 6:47:00 PM
Gary, , Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Gary Hatfield
Date: 5/28/2014 8:14:00 PM
Thank you skat! I look forward to becoming familiar with this site and those folks on it.
Date: 5/28/2014 5:35:00 PM
Welcome to Poetry Soup, Gary. This is a powerful, well written poem. I believe you will find much support here. Keep writing; comment on the poems of other writers and most of them will return the favor. Best wishes.
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Gary Hatfield
Date: 5/28/2014 8:40:00 PM
Thank you Faye. This is my first visit to here and first time to share anything I've written.
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