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Filaments of Partial Awareness

Whirling memories as dream-like pebbles
On a beach or in my pockets, in my hands
Opening and closing, opening and closing
Holding on tight, knowing them elusive

Vortex of films and fragments, tearing
my brain. Filaments of partial awareness
Hum hum of distant voices closing fastly in
Overwhelming all surrounding invasive

Windstorm of emotions, feelings, unfinished
thoughts. Softly spoken incomprehensible
sounds. Consciousness slowly returning
Human hand in mine, warm and comforting.

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March 12, 2017
© Darren White

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Lynn Marie Date: 3/16/2017 1:40:00 AM An intelligent, beautiful piece Darren :-) You are well on your way to becoming a master wordsmith with this brilliant write. I have been privileged to witness the power of touch in the most terrifying of circumstances. Your poem reminded me of its strength. Bravo blessings, lynn Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/16/2017 11:46:00 PM Thank you so much for your kind words and compliments Lynn, they always mean a lot to me :) <3

Arthur Vaso Date: 3/12/2017 10:45:00 PM You are a mathematical genius with words!! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/13/2017 1:08:00 AM haha, my friend, I am not, but thanks nonetheless :)

Sara Ella Date: 3/12/2017 4:01:00 PM To wake up with this one's little warm hand <3 This is so well expressed, Darren <3 Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/13/2017 1:06:00 AM Thanks Sara <3

Joanna Daniel Date: 3/12/2017 9:55:00 AM Oh, yes! This reminds me of those painful days in the past:( beautiful, Darren:) a 7:) deep pain has made you a prolific writer:) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/12/2017 10:05:00 AM Thank you Jo, for the 7 and for the compliment!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/12/2017 9:27:00 AM Yes, that human touch is indeed comforting and it imparts the knowledge that we are seen and loved. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/12/2017 9:34:00 AM It does, very much so. Thank you.

Probir Gupta Date: 3/12/2017 7:10:00 AM Your poem in our mind, 'warm and comforting' ... indeed ... Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/12/2017 7:43:00 AM Thank you, Probir, and indeed, comforting.

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 3/12/2017 5:38:00 AM Excellent. Well penned and very well expressed poem. Enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/12/2017 6:44:00 AM Ravi, thank you :)

Lisa Ricci Date: 3/12/2017 5:18:00 AM And what a unique and marvelous state of mind to be when just returning from half awareness to the full awareness and as you say to the warm and comforting hand. Good Morning Darren. This is beautiful and only the free verse/quatrain format could pull this message off. This was a great way to start the day. Honestly. Well done and expressed throughout. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 3/12/2017 5:41:00 AM Good morning, Lisa :) That is exactly how it can feel. I've been there many times, but that one time when a hand was holfing mine, that one time remains the most vivid in my memories.