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Filaments of Partial Awareness

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Whirling memories as dream-like pebbles On a beach or in my pockets, in my hands Opening and closing, opening and closing Holding on tight, knowing them elusive Vortex of films and fragments, tearing my brain. Filaments of partial awareness Hum hum of distant voices closing fastly in Overwhelming all surrounding invasive Windstorm of emotions, feelings, unfinished thoughts. Softly spoken incomprehensible sounds. Consciousness slowly returning Human hand in mine, warm and comforting. *** March 12, 2017 © Darren White

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Lynn Marie

Date: 3/16/2017 1:40:00 AM

An intelligent, beautiful piece Darren :-) You are well on your way to becoming a master wordsmith with this brilliant write. I have been privileged to witness the power of touch in the most terrifying of circumstances. Your poem reminded me of its strength. Bravo blessings, lynn

Darren White
Date: 3/16/2017 11:46:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words and compliments Lynn, they always mean a lot to me :) <3

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/12/2017 10:45:00 PM

You are a mathematical genius with words!!

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 1:08:00 AM

haha, my friend, I am not, but thanks nonetheless :)

Sara Ella

Date: 3/12/2017 4:01:00 PM

To wake up with this one's little warm hand <3 This is so well expressed, Darren <3

Darren White
Date: 3/13/2017 1:06:00 AM

Thanks Sara <3

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/12/2017 9:55:00 AM

Oh, yes! This reminds me of those painful days in the past:( beautiful, Darren:) a 7:) deep pain has made you a prolific writer:)

Darren White
Date: 3/12/2017 10:05:00 AM

Thank you Jo, for the 7 and for the compliment!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/12/2017 9:27:00 AM

Yes, that human touch is indeed comforting and it imparts the knowledge that we are seen and loved.

Darren White
Date: 3/12/2017 9:34:00 AM

It does, very much so. Thank you.

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/12/2017 7:10:00 AM

Your poem in our mind, 'warm and comforting' ... indeed ...

Darren White
Date: 3/12/2017 7:43:00 AM

Thank you, Probir, and indeed, comforting.

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 3/12/2017 5:38:00 AM

Excellent. Well penned and very well expressed poem. Enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing it.

Darren White
Date: 3/12/2017 6:44:00 AM

Ravi, thank you :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/12/2017 5:18:00 AM

And what a unique and marvelous state of mind to be when just returning from half awareness to the full awareness and as you say to the warm and comforting hand. Good Morning Darren. This is beautiful and only the free verse/quatrain format could pull this message off. This was a great way to start the day. Honestly. Well done and expressed throughout.

Darren White
Date: 3/12/2017 5:41:00 AM

Good morning, Lisa :) That is exactly how it can feel. I've been there many times, but that one time when a hand was holfing mine, that one time remains the most vivid in my memories.