fierce sun

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Girl with Umbrella, Suzette Richards – image generated 27/11/2024

Umbrellas are not only associated with rain. In the fierce heat of the African sun, it is customary for people to carry umbrellas to ward off the sunlight—it can be traced to other cultures as well.

Sanford-style tanka

fierce sun 
evaporates my thoughts 
breeze 
flips my umbrella 
redirects my mind

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Crystol Woods

Date: 12/31/2024 12:33:00 PM

Succinct and beautiful language describing the internal thoughts of the subject in the picture. I love how the outward change directs inward change as well. Lovely! Xo

Miranda Hawley

Date: 12/31/2024 8:41:00 AM

Short and sweet. I like it.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/20/2024 7:31:00 PM

Beautiful!

Suzette Richards
Date: 12/21/2024 1:04:00 PM

Thanks, Kim :)

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 12/16/2024 9:46:00 AM

An excellent Tanka - Sanford style! This is the magic of poetry - so much said in so few words!

Suzette Richards
Date: 12/21/2024 1:04:00 PM

Thank you. Mala :)

Anisha Dutta

Date: 12/11/2024 6:24:00 AM

Sure to try on my way. Blessings.

Suzette Richards
Date: 12/21/2024 1:05:00 PM

Thanks, Anisha :)

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 11/27/2024 7:38:00 PM

reads like a non-conforming haiku, interesting

Suzette Richards
Date: 11/27/2024 10:24:00 PM

It was not my intention to emulate haiku, Seeker; rather a minimalistic tanka, ie Sanford-style tanka. Thanks for reading and your comment which gave me pause for thought. :)