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Feeling His Rhapsody

It was like listening to the music of Rhapsody in Blue, the striking of the piano keys and vibration of wind instruments. The faster the music got his anger spewed with an inner wrath, loud voice and harsh words. Looking into his fathomless brown eyes told me the story he was holding back. In my heart I evoke the wist of his youth that I will always embrace for all eternity ignoring the moment patiently welcome the quietus of his calm. 3/15/2018
Poetry Contest: Five Words, Please Sponsored by: Broken Wings

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Date: 4/9/2018 11:04:00 PM
Love your "Looking into his fathomless brown eyes told me the story he was holding back." Most deserving win, Eve. Congrats.
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Date: 4/3/2018 2:20:00 AM
so beautiful! this poem gave me a warm feeling thanks for sharing!
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Date: 4/2/2018 6:04:00 PM
Eve, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem, you used the required words so well . . .
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Date: 4/1/2018 3:03:00 AM
Powerful indeed, congratulations on your well-deserved win... Mick
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Date: 3/31/2018 7:48:00 PM
The music and your poem go hand and hand! What a wonderful use of these words.....(and some of the most emotional music to use as a metaphor!) Congratulations Eve ! and thank you, thank you for your dear comments and generosity on my work!
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Date: 3/19/2018 1:03:00 PM
A heart that calms...Very nicely penned Eve..
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Date: 3/19/2018 5:50:00 AM
A stunner for the contest Eve. You are hard to beat.
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Date: 3/18/2018 11:13:00 AM
This is a beautifully expressed deep, meaningful and thought provoking poem Eve. Your evocative words leave us wanting to know more.. Superb poetry. Best wishes for a win! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
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Date: 3/17/2018 1:55:00 PM
eve,the whole piece is a rhapsody-- so fluent and fierce, then gentle in the end... huggs
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Date: 3/17/2018 10:22:00 AM
wow, I think you did amazing both with the theme and the form. This is one I REALLY want to try. There are so many I need to do, but I have so little time. It's killing me!!
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Date: 3/16/2018 6:17:00 PM
That's nice. Good luck for the contest.
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Date: 3/16/2018 9:39:00 AM
Great use of the 5 words Eve...
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Date: 3/16/2018 7:27:00 AM
Great verse Eve, you rose well to the challenge, GL in the contest. Tom
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Date: 3/16/2018 4:51:00 AM
This is a difficult challenge, Eve. You have done well with your five words, and the content leaves the reader wanting to know what influences is his youth make him so. Good luck.
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Date: 3/16/2018 1:54:00 AM
Beautiful, I can feel the words, and this makes me smile!! :)
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Date: 3/15/2018 10:01:00 PM
So lovely it went straight to my heart... Beautiful, Eve!
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Date: 3/15/2018 7:20:00 PM
Nicely done, Eve. Very sweet poem.
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