Feel the Past

An eyesore in the community as progress takes its toll.
Windows broken, rust on the old metal frames
Vacant, dust filled, old broken file cabinet in the corner
Taking a walk through it, I could feel the past
Wondered how many lives this old building touched
A way of life for so many 
Security in a weekly paycheck
A faded time card on the floor where the office was
Dust covered wooden desk
A monument to the industrial age
A table with the boards curved from age
Where people ate lunch, talked, laughed, cried
Discussions about the kids, sports, politics, shop talk
Feel the past? Yes, days gone by, good days
Boards rotted on the loading dock, a rusted hand truck
No ventilation, no complaints, an honest days work
Clipboard hanging on the wooden beam
Can’t you feel it? 
Shuffling into the parking lot, lunch cans in hand
See you tomorrow
Kids waiting for Dad to come home, supper on.
Just another day.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Freeman Avatar
July 8, 2009 at 8:55 PM
Very realistic write Vince. My poem you commented on "9-11" alluded to the prophesy in the bible 'Rev. 17:16-17" I am not sure who's heart, it was placed in, to fulfil God's will, maybe our president as well as the ten Horns. Godly love ,jm
Spence Sr Avatar
July 7, 2009 at 3:43 PM
This piece is very realistic. As I drive pass some of these places, I have to scratch my head and wonder at times. I like the flow of the piece and the moral of the message. Great job! ~Joseph
Penton-Leccese Avatar
July 7, 2009 at 1:07 PM
Very nice. Lots of Love, Misty
Fish Avatar
July 4, 2009 at 11:00 AM
Hey, Vince.. I'm surprised I didn't comment on this one when your first posted it. Then and now, it evokes the feeling I have in regard to the old out buildings, barns and bunk houses we left standing on the ranch. Great retropective glance! Thanks again... ~<><
Dray Avatar
July 3, 2009 at 7:19 PM
thank you vince
Richards Avatar
July 1, 2009 at 12:38 PM
So glad I caught this one, Vince. The sad fact of progress is evident in every town...places that once were alive with voices, and activity, now just sit as relics to mar the landscape. Well done....putting heart into an old place of business. ~Best wishes, Carrie
Hudson Avatar
June 30, 2009 at 7:12 PM
I lived it. The factory worker, that was me for 18 years of my life. Worked in a cotton mill. It was honest work. Hard, honest work.-AA
Bird Avatar
June 30, 2009 at 7:08 AM
This is sad, but, like all things eventually come to an end. Love the title, and how you carried that through the entire poem.
Devonshire Avatar
June 28, 2009 at 3:56 PM
I couldn't help but cry reading this, Vince. I don't want my father's house to become one of these old buildings. Too many wonderful memories for me. I've pledged to take over the maintenance now. I want the home to be a monument to his integrity, not "the industrial age." Wish people would take more pride in their past and preserve their family homes. God bless you for sharing this as I prepare to move to Dad's old home. Love, Carolyn
Cantu Avatar
June 27, 2009 at 2:19 PM
@.@ Wow; you know, this makes me wonder about how future civilizations will perceive our actual times (incredibly amazing, corrupt, decaying, the basic of modern age technology, just another brick, etc) @.@ we all as human beings tend to understand our chronological context and others' too but...how would another un-human thing would perceive us as human civilization?@.@ thanks for the experience!!!=D
Buys Avatar
June 27, 2009 at 2:09 PM
A soulful poem that captures the atmosphere of days gone by so very well. Good job. Regards Heidie
Mason Avatar
June 27, 2009 at 11:25 AM
If walls could talk ... heah? I really enjoy your history writings ... brings back a lot ... don't have many empty lots/buildings in the NWest outside the two big cities ... they tear everything away too fast for the big box stores ... smile ...
Megens Avatar
June 26, 2009 at 2:50 PM
excelent poem vince a real touch on life
Fraser Avatar
June 26, 2009 at 10:07 AM
Brilliant poem Vince, places in Scotland just viewed past my eyes as i read this, derelict history in decayed ruin, where families stayed - home cooking brewing, factories closed, future lost - conglomerates don't care, only about the costs>>James
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