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Watch how easily souls are gathered When words are falsely spent to mock Unfettered as if hearts so mattered Like tossing bread crumbs from a dock. The least of ducklings are discerning Fooled they're not by false repast Paddling toward a chance of earning While food through rippled currents last. Fear rises from life's ledge Only when you are looking down Peering up from waters edge Only warm sunlight can be found. Trade only notes in eider down And keep your carriage dry Nary ye nest with unknown colors And place not your fortune in a lie. If it walks like a duck, It could be a goose... Feeding the Ducklings Contest Judged 5/30/2016

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Date: 3/16/2017 12:09:00 AM
Oh I adore this Charlie :-) The wisdom and spirituality is profoundly beautiful. That the nuggets of life lessons is told through 'ducklings is...genius :-) One of my all time favourite poems. Bravo a special fave, 7+++ blessings, lynn
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Date: 6/4/2016 9:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your contest placement....
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Date: 6/4/2016 10:33:00 PM
Thank you Janis...
Date: 6/4/2016 10:39:00 AM
Hey Congrats in the second chance contest. I just really like this one.
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Date: 6/4/2016 3:56:00 PM
You're so kind Andrea. I might have faired better had you been judging. But alas, 0 for two. Oh well, we'll try harder next time. Ya gotta give em what they want...
Date: 6/3/2016 9:15:00 PM
charlie, she is having a second chance contest and has told me we can enter with our duckling poems again. Give it a try if you have not already.
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Date: 6/1/2016 10:37:00 PM
wow, this had quite a spiritual lesson with it, I think you did an incredible job here, Charlie.
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Date: 6/2/2016 10:35:00 AM
Thank you Andrea, but alas, not held with much regard by the judge. Such is life...
Date: 5/31/2016 8:53:00 AM
A very enjoyable finish. Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 5/31/2016 7:14:00 PM
Thank you Scott...
Date: 5/30/2016 12:33:00 PM
- Enjoy reading your suggestions, Charlie :) ..... great written - A top placement in the contest, good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/30/2016 5:00:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise...
Date: 5/30/2016 10:29:00 AM
I love your metaphorical take on this theme, Charlie! Very different from all I've read, and so full of wisdom. Best wishes for the contest. 7 Sandra
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Date: 5/30/2016 10:38:00 AM
Sandra, I do so appreciate your encouragement...
Date: 5/29/2016 1:40:00 AM
The opening stanza is intellectually stirring... I like it very much... The treatment is sort of off beat...
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Date: 5/29/2016 8:24:00 AM
Thank you Probir. I seem to always see a different take on some themes, I guess that's what makes poetry fun to write...

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