February Fever #2

You have loved me through the worries.
You've stood by me through the pain.
I have found you there still waiting
When the world was bright again.

Now to you, my loving soulmate,
All my vows I would renew.
Are there any words so worthy
They can tell of love so true?

In the battle of the poets
Closeted within their dens,
Words their only ammunition
Shooting from their ink filled pens,
 
Seeking phrase, uniquely pretty
And an unused metaphor,
They have not the time to help me
Woo the one whom I adore.

Without muse or bard asistance
Am I equal to the game?
In trite words of deep devotion
Will the message be the same?

I can't say it grandiosely
As I show this love of mine.
The old hackneyed words must do then.
You're my one, true Valentine.

By Joyce

Revised for Deborah's contest.  won 3rd place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 2/3/2010 6:49:00 PM
Hey Joyce! Congratulations on your win in the contest! Great write! Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 1/21/2010 3:59:00 AM
Congratulations Joyce, on your success in Deborah Guzzi’s, “Who Loves Ya Baby” contest with this heartfelt poem. It's easy to see why you placed. Your poetic skills shine. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 1/13/2010 2:42:00 PM
JOyce, a BIG congratulations to you. Luv, andrea
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Date: 1/13/2010 7:26:00 AM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest.Rgds brian
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Date: 1/13/2010 6:17:00 AM
Joyce - many congrats on your winning poem. Rgds Janette
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Date: 1/12/2010 7:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Joyce! Great entry! Thanks for sharing. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 1/12/2010 9:08:00 AM
Congrats on the win, I agree with Deborah about the line, "Seeking phrase..." Very beautiful.
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Date: 1/12/2010 8:25:00 AM
ABSOLUTELY GORGEOUS! So touching. I alove ever verse. Just amazing!!!! Congratulations on your so well deserved win., Joyce. Love, Lainie
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Date: 12/30/2009 2:07:00 PM
Loved the insight of this line "Seeking phrase, uniquely pretty/And an unused metaphor" Light & Love
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Date: 12/30/2009 11:38:00 AM
Oh, I see, it's for that valentine contest. This is very nice. I will have to find your other entry! I think I have one REAL love poem I can enter myself (since most of mine are just imagination ones. haha) So glad you love triolets. I think they are wondrous little poems! andrea
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Date: 12/30/2009 12:26:00 AM
Best wishes with this one Joyce.Thank you for your welcome comments today .Rgds Brian
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Date: 12/29/2009 1:38:00 PM
Interesting write in this one that should do well in the contest, Good luck . Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my poem "Decorate". Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 12/29/2009 1:05:00 PM
Great entry Joyce and good luck in Debbie's contest... I just entered My Special Love too.. great fun to do contests... been without heat for 3 days so just getting back in the swing of writing.. just installed new one this second... waiting for my fingers to unfreeze... great write about the luv of your life... hope to experience it one day myself ..soon.. blessings ..luv... HNY 2010 .. Linda-Marie
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Date: 12/29/2009 12:09:00 PM
Beautifully done here, Joyce. Good luck in the contest. Suggestions: remove the "I" from the end of the sentence in the 2nd stanza, line #1 and in the 4th stanza is "phrase" the word you are using or do you mean "praise" ??? Wasn't sure but the school teacher in me can't help but ask ... smile ...
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