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Fatal Ego

A muscular aerial acrobat
Young Mandy avoided nets, just like that
  
    Going netless has its perks
     Only if your balance works

You could say hubris made Mandy go splat



*for Natalie’s “Die a Fun Death” contest
11/20/2011 (Hubris is excessive pride or arrogance)

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/6/2011 10:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Natalie's "Die A Fun Death" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

David Williams

Date: 12/5/2011 1:49:00 AM

Carolyn congrats on your win..David

Bob Quigley

Date: 12/4/2011 10:17:00 PM

I told you that this was a winner. Congratulations Carolyn

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer

Date: 12/4/2011 9:39:00 PM

Carolyn-Wow what a different style from you-Like Carrie's, I would never have guessed this was yours-quite impressive that you can write in many different styles :) A big congrats. to you for your win in my contest :)

Bl Devnath

Date: 11/23/2011 7:21:00 AM

'Only if you balance works', so nice of it. Thanks for winning write. bl

Gwendolen Song

Date: 11/22/2011 10:10:00 PM

Three cheers for a quick death defying death......lol. Love, Gwendolen

Daver Austin

Date: 11/22/2011 2:20:00 PM

I'll bet Mandy was saying, all the way down, I'm too wonderful to die. Great limerick. Have a good Thanksgiving. We plan a simple dinner with our cats. Win that contest. Love, daver

John Freeman

Date: 11/21/2011 3:52:00 PM

Quite a vivid Splat Carolyn, rather have the net. Agape, Moses

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/20/2011 10:06:00 PM

Ha, ha, very creative write! It is sad poem, but quite humorous at the same time!! I love the third line, at the end, "...Mandy go splat" very hilarious!! Great work!!

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/20/2011 6:49:00 PM

Splat! Now go stand on your head...lol.. Your one clever lady..Love, LNC

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/20/2011 3:42:00 PM

i thought i'd never smile, at a death poem, Carolyn. yet this is so good, so funny, is there a hidden message here i wonder?reminds me of modern life. good luck in contest. harry

Tony Lane

Date: 11/20/2011 3:15:00 PM

Forget the net it's death he met. Tony

Jack Horne

Date: 11/20/2011 10:57:00 AM

LOL, poor Mandy! We went to see the Moscow State Circus once and I was expecting to see those acrobats, trapeze artists etc splatter onto the ground. Scary! Luckily, no one ended up like Mandy

John Rhinem

Date: 11/20/2011 10:37:00 AM

Smile, yep, just like that. Great verse my dear * My love always, John! *

Bob Quigley

Date: 11/20/2011 10:27:00 AM

You've got a winner here Carolyn. Still laughing