Fatal Awareness

Bang, Bang, Bang 
The cracks in my ears 
Run,run,gone the silhouette of my peers 
My boots are sandals of mud, moulded like baked pastry 
Time, time, time, was the beating of my thought 
March, march, march, were my orders of before 
Now the battle smoke has cleared and my heart can feel no more
Strains of my friends leave memories upon this ground 
Like ripped soggy tissue, all around 
And I am alone, too scared to make sound 
Too much realization too young to know 
What things I could be doing and what things I should bestow  
What sights I should of seen and what has tarnished the in-between 
The passive reacting cold has taken my future, blemished the soul 
Young,young,young was the age of us all 
Kill, blood, kill was all we had in store
Rapid swirling deaf I see the blood inside
I’ve taken one round and I’ll never survive 
I can see a rain drop roaming down this rock 
It’s the last vision to understand this life I still have got  
It’s harmonic stature it’s peaceful rot 
And here is my end I cannot grip a stare 
I cannot effort my fingers I know I must be dying, seconds to bare 
I don’t know what to do but I am not crying 
It’s getting hard to breathe I cannot feel my toes 
I can hear my mother calling, I muster a smile 
I am surrounded by the loved ones escalating mile upon mile 
A final push of effort understood as folly
Yawn, gasp, then death has taken me to dark 
I’ll miss a many faces; I’ll never ride my bike 
I’ll never kiss those soft lips or feed a little guy 
I’ll never enjoy those things I’ve always lived to buy 
And I’ll never know the future as I am far too young to die

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 7/13/2012 2:50:00 PM
Emotive and very descriptive of one dying from a wound from fighting..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 7/12/2012 7:44:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Paul! Love, Kim
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Date: 7/12/2012 7:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Any Poem" contest Paul. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/12/2012 4:28:00 AM
Paul congrats on your win...David
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Date: 7/12/2012 3:56:00 AM
Congrats on your win Paul
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Date: 7/11/2012 8:12:00 PM
Paul ~ congratulations with your awesome win~ Good night~PD
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Date: 7/7/2012 11:23:00 PM
Wow! powerful write many blessings to you x
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