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Funeral today Teardrops flow freely I gaze at the sky Sun sets on your life Glorious gold glow Soothes my breaking heart Jan Allison 16th October 2014 Contest: Design Your Tableau Sponsor: Nette Onclaud 3. One day I saw the sun set forty-four times!' … 'You know, when you're feeling very sad, sunsets are wonderful ~awarded 4th place~

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Date: 10/25/2014 9:21:00 PM
Jan, yours is truly one of my favorites in this winner list. I saw only one other so far that I liked as well as yours. (but I started at the bottom. I wonder what gems she has at the top!!) Congratulations.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/26/2014 2:50:00 AM
Many thanks for such a beautiful inspiring comment:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 10/25/2014 3:48:00 PM
Jan, stopping by again with my congratulations on your win for this poem. I knew it was a winner when I first read it. Hugs, Sandra
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/25/2014 3:52:00 PM
Thanks so much Sandra with current events in my life this poem means a great deal to me:-( Hugs jan xxx
Date: 10/25/2014 9:51:00 AM
Congrats Jan, this touched me. And that is the point. BG
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/25/2014 10:25:00 AM
Thanks Barbara it is very close to my heart with my dad being terminally ill:-( Hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/25/2014 7:38:00 AM
- There are many that I have read before .... and many who not arrived at the winners list .... but, everyone can not win! - Really hard to judge .... (glad it's not me :) - In my eyes, everyone is so beautiful written! - CONGRATULATIONS !!! - Have a restful and lovely weekend,Jan :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/25/2014 7:41:00 AM
Many thanks for the comment hugs jan xxx
Date: 10/25/2014 5:30:00 AM
Congrats on the win with this nicely done poem, Jan
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/25/2014 5:31:00 AM
Many thanks Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/25/2014 4:28:00 AM
Congratulations Jan on your win with this touching piece.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/25/2014 5:27:00 AM
Many thanks Maurice it is a special poem to me at this current time :-) hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/24/2014 6:09:00 PM
Tableau on a delicate subject., well done. Love, Joyce
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/24/2014 6:15:00 PM
Thanks Joyce. Many of my recent writes are inspired by my father :-) Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/24/2014 4:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Jan. Glad to see you placed well with this. XOXO
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/24/2014 4:44:00 PM
It means a great deal to me Brenda thank you so much:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/22/2014 4:29:00 PM
Life ends... life goes on... beautiful poem!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/22/2014 4:33:00 PM
Thanks so much Terry - I was thinking about my lovely dad when I wrote this:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/18/2014 3:18:00 PM
Ah, such a sad and poignant read! I could feel your sorrow while reading this. Be brave...time should heal.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/18/2014 3:22:00 PM
Thanks Suzanne - the event hasn't happened yet but my dad is terminally ill and he is the inspiration behind this poem:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 10/18/2014 11:57:00 AM
Sad, but such a terrific poem Jan, nice one - James :)xx
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James Fraser
Date: 10/18/2014 12:34:00 PM
I'm sure it will Jan xx
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/18/2014 12:24:00 PM
Thanks James - my dad is the inspiration behind this poem - I hope it does well as a tribute to him in days to come:-( hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/18/2014 9:38:00 AM
So did we both get poem of the day with our poem? I am sure you got it earlier this week. that is so cool, Jan, and I have only five min to try to see my comments and then be gone the rest of the day with Joe on the road. Hope you are having a great weekend. I will see you sunday sometime.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/18/2014 11:36:00 AM
YOU got the poem of the day as it was your version of the poem that was chosen but of course I am happy to share the honour - Richard came and commented on my page - bless him he is such a caring thoughtful man. My poem of the day was for my Winter poem:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/17/2014 8:03:00 PM
Jan...just past terrific...wow :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/18/2014 3:08:00 AM
Oh David that is such a wonderful comment I have a massive smile on my face! I guess my father's terminal illness is giving me inspiration in a way i never dreamed possible. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/17/2014 12:31:00 PM
Jan...wow...absolutely beautiful and so powerful. Gave me goose bumps. A prize offering for the contest for sure. Sandra
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/17/2014 2:52:00 PM
I guess with my father being terminally ill it helps to be able to write and I write from the heart Sandra - I am inspired by my amazing courageous father and this poem is dedicated to him. thanks for the wonderful comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/17/2014 7:32:00 AM
The poem is exquisite in its conception although the inspiration springs from a tragic event: Your father's illness! I lost mine when I was ten from cancer! Death for me , my friend Jan, "Is the pillow of eternity upon which the soul rests for a while dreaming of the life to come" God bless your father and the whole family! A seven!
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Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 10/17/2014 9:08:00 AM
Exactly my dear Jan, however a parent is a parent , no matter the age and the pain is natural BUT our parents live with us as long as we live! God bless you!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/17/2014 8:28:00 AM
Oh Gosh Demetrios it makes me realise how very fortunate I am to have mine for so long:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Demetrios Trifiatis
Date: 10/17/2014 8:16:00 AM
The ancient Greeks were saying: "No bad thing happens in life without a good thing to bring" Sorry for you mother, I lost mine when I was fourteen! As I came to understand: " When God takes a child's parent GOD adapts that child HIMSELF!" Hugs xxx
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/17/2014 7:59:00 AM
Oh Demetrios you comment brought a tear to my eye not only for you lovely comment but also at your loss at such a tender age - mum lost her mum to cancer at aged 9 - she has never got over it. My husband's cancer started me on my poetic journey so out of something bad something amazing has also happened:-0 hugs jan xxx
Date: 10/17/2014 4:53:00 AM
powerful piece of writing jan
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/17/2014 5:06:00 AM
Thanks Liam:-) Hugs jan xxx
Date: 10/16/2014 10:01:00 PM
wow Jan, you did so splendidly with this one. Gosh, I just don't know how to do this one and it's filling up SO FAST . YIKES
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/17/2014 2:43:00 AM
Thanks Andrea I do so value your feedback - events in my life are helping pen words that have great meaning to me and I guess they touch other people too:-) hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/16/2014 8:07:00 PM
I'm glad you are writing this to help work out your feelings Jan. You penned this beautifully. HUGS XOXO
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 8:08:00 PM
Thanks Brenda:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 10/16/2014 7:09:00 PM
Hi Jan, May the glorious gold, glow on you forever. Great sentimental poem. Well done. Keep up the good work. Take care. You are in our prayers. Earl
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 7:12:00 PM
Thank you so much Earl:-) hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/16/2014 6:45:00 PM
Jan this is an inspired write. I never thought that particular form could rise to this level. As always you have my love and support for you and your family. If not for love then what. With great respect I am going to add it to my favorites list. With these words your father will live forever more. God Bless You All.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 6:51:00 PM
Thanks Maurice for you friendship and unfailing support and your wonderful comments. It's amazing where we get inspiration from isn't it - I wonder if i would have come up with this theme if things were different in my life - but we will never know the answer to that one I guess. Hugs my lovely friend:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/16/2014 6:36:00 PM
this is sad but very beautiful at the same time...
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 6:38:00 PM
Thank you Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/16/2014 6:21:00 PM
Oh that brings tears to my eyes, hugs hugs hugs.sad and beautiful. you write with your soul.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 6:39:00 PM
Hope Abbie is being a little angel for you:-0 love the website cas its awesome i have commented:-) hugs jan xx
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Casarah Nance
Date: 10/16/2014 6:33:00 PM
I'm glad to be back, my husband will be away all weekend too so I'll be on a lot the next couple days playing catch up :) miss you too, hugsXX
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 6:24:00 PM
woohoooo welcome home my friend oh boy i have missed you - Tim and Maurice have done an awesome job keeping my spirits up during a tough few days, but I'm back to writing again now:-) hugs Jan xxxxxxxx
Date: 10/16/2014 6:13:00 PM
Hi dear Jan losing someone We hold dearly is desperately painful.But the setting of the sun made me think of someone who is struggling and somehow then rested in peace.That glow makes me think of the soul which never leaves us,reminding us that it would always be close,more than We imagine.Sad and besutiful"!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 6:20:00 PM
Thanks Charmaine I was thinking of my dad when I wrote this. i fear we will lose him very soon now:-( Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/16/2014 5:40:00 PM
for there peace is found..good luck Jan
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 5:53:00 PM
Thanks so much Frederic:-) hugs Jan xxx
Date: 10/16/2014 5:26:00 PM
Jan, I just wanted you to know also that I do deeply empathize with what you and your family are going though. My father, bless his eternal soul, died of lung cancer on December 18, 1975 a few months after I graduated from the college in Wichita, Kansas where I originally come from. He was only "52" years old. I just turned "63" on October 14th. A day doesn't go by that I don't pause and think of him. It's a sad thing, of course, but life goes on. Best Wishes, Gary
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 10/16/2014 5:34:00 PM
I am so lucky Gary he's just turned 90 and mum 92 next month - gosh life is tough isn't it. I am so so lucky i began to write when my hubby got cancer last year and post here in febraury - its been a massive turning point in my life:-( hugs jan xx
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