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Farewell Tableau

Funeral today
Teardrops flow freely
I gaze at the sky
Sun sets on your life
Glorious gold glow
Soothes my breaking heart

Jan Allison
16th October 2014
Contest: Design Your Tableau
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud

3. One day I saw the sun set forty-four times!' … 'You know, when you're feeling very sad, sunsets are wonderful
~awarded 4th place~

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2014

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Andrea Dietrich

October 25, 2014 at 9:21 PM

Jan, yours is truly one of my favorites in this winner list. I saw only one other so far that I liked as well as yours. (but I started at the bottom. I wonder what gems she has at the top!!) Congratulations.

October 26, 2014 at 2:50 AM

Many thanks for such a beautiful inspiring comment:-) hugs jan xx

October 25, 2014 at 3:48 PM

Jan, stopping by again with my congratulations on your win for this poem. I knew it was a winner when I first read it. Hugs, Sandra

October 25, 2014 at 3:52 PM

Thanks so much Sandra with current events in my life this poem means a great deal to me:-( Hugs jan xxx

Barbara Gorelick

October 25, 2014 at 9:51 AM

Congrats Jan, this touched me. And that is the point. BG

October 25, 2014 at 10:25 AM

Thanks Barbara it is very close to my heart with my dad being terminally ill:-( Hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

October 25, 2014 at 7:38 AM

- There are many that I have read before .... and many who not arrived at the winners list .... but, everyone can not win! - Really hard to judge .... (glad it's not me :) - In my eyes, everyone is so beautiful written! - CONGRATULATIONS !!! - Have a restful and lovely weekend,Jan :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

October 25, 2014 at 7:41 AM

Many thanks for the comment hugs jan xxx

October 25, 2014 at 5:30 AM

Congrats on the win with this nicely done poem, Jan

October 25, 2014 at 5:31 AM

Many thanks Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan xx

October 25, 2014 at 4:28 AM

Congratulations Jan on your win with this touching piece.

October 25, 2014 at 5:27 AM

Many thanks Maurice it is a special poem to me at this current time :-) hugs Jan xxx

October 24, 2014 at 6:09 PM

Tableau on a delicate subject., well done. Love, Joyce

October 24, 2014 at 6:15 PM

Thanks Joyce. Many of my recent writes are inspired by my father :-) Hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

October 24, 2014 at 4:39 PM

Congratulations on your win Jan. Glad to see you placed well with this. XOXO

October 24, 2014 at 4:44 PM

It means a great deal to me Brenda thank you so much:-) Hugs Jan xx

October 22, 2014 at 4:29 PM

Life ends... life goes on... beautiful poem!

October 22, 2014 at 4:33 PM

Thanks so much Terry - I was thinking about my lovely dad when I wrote this:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Suzanne C. Goudreau

October 18, 2014 at 3:18 PM

Ah, such a sad and poignant read! I could feel your sorrow while reading this. Be brave...time should heal.

October 18, 2014 at 3:22 PM

Thanks Suzanne - the event hasn't happened yet but my dad is terminally ill and he is the inspiration behind this poem:-) Hugs jan xx

October 18, 2014 at 11:57 AM

Sad, but such a terrific poem Jan, nice one - James :)xx

October 18, 2014 at 12:34 PM

I'm sure it will Jan xx

October 18, 2014 at 12:24 PM

Thanks James - my dad is the inspiration behind this poem - I hope it does well as a tribute to him in days to come:-( hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

October 18, 2014 at 9:38 AM

So did we both get poem of the day with our poem? I am sure you got it earlier this week. that is so cool, Jan, and I have only five min to try to see my comments and then be gone the rest of the day with Joe on the road. Hope you are having a great weekend. I will see you sunday sometime.

October 18, 2014 at 11:36 AM

YOU got the poem of the day as it was your version of the poem that was chosen but of course I am happy to share the honour - Richard came and commented on my page - bless him he is such a caring thoughtful man. My poem of the day was for my Winter poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

October 17, 2014 at 8:03 PM

Jan...just past terrific...wow :)

October 18, 2014 at 3:08 AM

Oh David that is such a wonderful comment I have a massive smile on my face! I guess my father's terminal illness is giving me inspiration in a way i never dreamed possible. Hugs Jan xx

October 17, 2014 at 12:31 PM

Jan...wow...absolutely beautiful and so powerful. Gave me goose bumps. A prize offering for the contest for sure. Sandra

October 17, 2014 at 2:52 PM

I guess with my father being terminally ill it helps to be able to write and I write from the heart Sandra - I am inspired by my amazing courageous father and this poem is dedicated to him. thanks for the wonderful comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Demetrios Trifiatis

October 17, 2014 at 7:32 AM

The poem is exquisite in its conception although the inspiration springs from a tragic event: Your father's illness! I lost mine when I was ten from cancer! Death for me , my friend Jan, "Is the pillow of eternity upon which the soul rests for a while dreaming of the life to come" God bless your father and the whole family! A seven!

Demetrios Trifiatis

October 17, 2014 at 9:08 AM

Exactly my dear Jan, however a parent is a parent , no matter the age and the pain is natural BUT our parents live with us as long as we live! God bless you!

October 17, 2014 at 8:28 AM

Oh Gosh Demetrios it makes me realise how very fortunate I am to have mine for so long:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Demetrios Trifiatis

October 17, 2014 at 8:16 AM

The ancient Greeks were saying: "No bad thing happens in life without a good thing to bring" Sorry for you mother, I lost mine when I was fourteen! As I came to understand: " When God takes a child's parent GOD adapts that child HIMSELF!" Hugs xxx

October 17, 2014 at 7:59 AM

Oh Demetrios you comment brought a tear to my eye not only for you lovely comment but also at your loss at such a tender age - mum lost her mum to cancer at aged 9 - she has never got over it. My husband's cancer started me on my poetic journey so out of something bad something amazing has also happened:-0 hugs jan xxx

October 17, 2014 at 4:53 AM

powerful piece of writing jan

October 17, 2014 at 5:06 AM

Thanks Liam:-) Hugs jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

October 16, 2014 at 10:01 PM

wow Jan, you did so splendidly with this one. Gosh, I just don't know how to do this one and it's filling up SO FAST . YIKES

October 17, 2014 at 2:43 AM

Thanks Andrea I do so value your feedback - events in my life are helping pen words that have great meaning to me and I guess they touch other people too:-) hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

October 16, 2014 at 8:07 PM

I'm glad you are writing this to help work out your feelings Jan. You penned this beautifully. HUGS XOXO

October 16, 2014 at 8:08 PM

Thanks Brenda:-) Hugs jan xx

Earl Schumacker

October 16, 2014 at 7:09 PM

Hi Jan, May the glorious gold, glow on you forever. Great sentimental poem. Well done. Keep up the good work. Take care. You are in our prayers. Earl

October 16, 2014 at 7:12 PM

Thank you so much Earl:-) hugs Jan xxx

October 16, 2014 at 6:45 PM

Jan this is an inspired write. I never thought that particular form could rise to this level. As always you have my love and support for you and your family. If not for love then what. With great respect I am going to add it to my favorites list. With these words your father will live forever more. God Bless You All.

October 16, 2014 at 6:51 PM

Thanks Maurice for you friendship and unfailing support and your wonderful comments. It's amazing where we get inspiration from isn't it - I wonder if i would have come up with this theme if things were different in my life - but we will never know the answer to that one I guess. Hugs my lovely friend:-) hugs Jan xx

October 16, 2014 at 6:36 PM

this is sad but very beautiful at the same time...

October 16, 2014 at 6:38 PM

Thank you Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

October 16, 2014 at 6:21 PM

Oh that brings tears to my eyes, hugs hugs hugs.sad and beautiful. you write with your soul.

October 16, 2014 at 6:39 PM

Hope Abbie is being a little angel for you:-0 love the website cas its awesome i have commented:-) hugs jan xx

October 16, 2014 at 6:33 PM

I'm glad to be back, my husband will be away all weekend too so I'll be on a lot the next couple days playing catch up :) miss you too, hugsXX

October 16, 2014 at 6:24 PM

woohoooo welcome home my friend oh boy i have missed you - Tim and Maurice have done an awesome job keeping my spirits up during a tough few days, but I'm back to writing again now:-) hugs Jan xxxxxxxx

Charmaine Chircop

October 16, 2014 at 6:13 PM

Hi dear Jan losing someone We hold dearly is desperately painful.But the setting of the sun made me think of someone who is struggling and somehow then rested in peace.That glow makes me think of the soul which never leaves us,reminding us that it would always be close,more than We imagine.Sad and besutiful"!

October 16, 2014 at 6:20 PM

Thanks Charmaine I was thinking of my dad when I wrote this. i fear we will lose him very soon now:-( Hugs Jan xxx

Frederic Parker

October 16, 2014 at 5:40 PM

for there peace is found..good luck Jan

October 16, 2014 at 5:53 PM

Thanks so much Frederic:-) hugs Jan xxx

October 16, 2014 at 5:26 PM

Jan, I just wanted you to know also that I do deeply empathize with what you and your family are going though. My father, bless his eternal soul, died of lung cancer on December 18, 1975 a few months after I graduated from the college in Wichita, Kansas where I originally come from. He was only "52" years old. I just turned "63" on October 14th. A day doesn't go by that I don't pause and think of him. It's a sad thing, of course, but life goes on. Best Wishes, Gary

October 16, 2014 at 5:34 PM

I am so lucky Gary he's just turned 90 and mum 92 next month - gosh life is tough isn't it. I am so so lucky i began to write when my hubby got cancer last year and post here in febraury - its been a massive turning point in my life:-( hugs jan xx

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