Far Away - a Collaboration With Olive

Shadowed silence vibrates melancholy
As the darkening clouds spiral overhead 
Open spaces, breathing air of mystery
bloody ink of terror break in...doused in dread 
Shattering the portrait to pieces instantly
A turn to the left & to the right hesitantly
A step forward or backwards...
Which way should I go? I sponge in woe
Wouldn't it be easier to go with the flow? 
I'm so far away from the sun-drenched day, 
Falling victim to nightfall's spellbinding dismay...
Tell me, which Way I should go? 
Don't mislead me with callous words
Creeping fear and shameful wonder crawl down my spine
My heart is beating with despair, feeling like a disgrace
Misfortune was crawling within my skin...becoming serpentine
Inside of my veins...and I'm Wishing to stay in one place…
But I could not...
I could not. You left me to rot...
There was a voice within shouting at me to move forward
I am scared, but i won't sweat it...that was really awkward
My feet were unstoppable. I couldn't help, but run
Pushing. Compelling me to traverse 
Running. Running. Running. Running in the sun . . . 
My heart's melody yearns for tragedy in reverse
Running for safety, I'm grieving to the core
Who will dare share an ounce of care?
Is this my misfortune? There's more hope in store
Whispering clear a prayer, hand me the rope of hope if you dare 
Wrapping my hands together...don't let me go
Ease the earthquake fear, quaking in my heart
I'm yearning for someone...let the blessed breeze blow
I want something or someone to blanket me or I'll depart
From His light... is it out of sight now?
Longing for His healing rain to shower down relief upon me somehow
I'm awakened by sudden realization that everything will work out in the end
As drizzle sprays, cooling down my stance...my insecure state of mind
I need a helping hand to reach out to me - I break instead of bend
Speechless and afraid, I have naught to say, for I am blind
I gape at her angelic appearance 
As she traced me a lament-carved frown 
I'm far, far from the roaring crowd in an instance
I'm gravity-bound, I've been weighed down
Who can put me back together?
Am I going to remain frozen forever?
I wander in the wilderness of my mind
Naked and ashamed - I feel like I've been left behind
Earning misfortune
Singing a sad, gracious tune
Running. Running. Running. Running in the sun . . .I have allowed
Myself to breathe in the air of mystery...far away from the cheerful crowd

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/5/2014 10:48:00 AM
Awesome job you and olive did! I loved every part of this poem down to the last line:)-Love Ettie
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Date: 8/5/2014 5:12:00 AM
nice!
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Date: 8/4/2014 7:24:00 PM
Belated congratulations for being chosen as poem of the day... Verlena
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Date: 8/3/2014 3:16:00 PM
Congrats to both poets on this being chosen for Poem of the Day. "I wander in the wilderness of my mind Naked and ashamed - I feel like I've been left behind Earning misfortune Singing a sad, gracious tune Running. Running. Running. Running in the sun . . .I have allowed Myself to breathe in the air of mystery...far away from the cheerful crowd" The ending nailed it!!!!!
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Date: 8/3/2014 12:37:00 PM
What a perfect going away present for Olive. Poem of the day...Hope she can get internet where she is heading....congrats guys
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Date: 8/1/2014 7:04:00 PM
Okay I'm done re-reading it and I must say that I can relate to it. How did you and OliVe come up with such a dark treasure? It's like an aching light in the dark.
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Date: 8/1/2014 6:29:00 PM
WOW This gave me goosebumps when i read it - so sad and so powerful with great imagery as ever. What a collaboration - well done David and Olive! hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 8/1/2014 6:23:00 PM
Olive and DWB....this is amazing////Tim
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Date: 8/1/2014 6:07:00 PM
It's my pleasure to write with you David.. :) I really appreciate and feel honored that you choose me among the good writers here.. :) I am sorry not quite have so much time though as I am so busy with many things but I am glad I gave it a try with you.. :) Don't stop your pen.. :) Your words are very illustrative and imaginative.. :) this write is sad sad.. but i hope you don't reciprocate that.. :) Be happy always.. :) your friend here, Olive Eloisa
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