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Fantasy Deletes Pain

Straps around his waist,
And shining armour loosened.
Brittle backbone hurts.
Notepad, pen: poetry waits,
Fantasy deletes all pain

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White Wolf

January 24, 2017 at 3:42 AM

I think I've only ever done one tanka! Too hard basket for me! But you make it read so well and smooth and appear so easily! Love it /|\

Darren White

January 24, 2017 at 3:44 AM

So few words available to bring the message. I love that. Thanks Budgie :)

Claudia Polydoro

January 23, 2017 at 7:49 PM

Nothing like going away from reality when it becomes too much... And losing oneself in poetry is AMAZING... <3 So much said in a few lines... Gread one, Darren <3

Claudia Polydoro

January 24, 2017 at 3:39 AM

Yup... truth ;) hehehe <3

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 11:26 PM

It is, isn't it? Nothing beats it.... well... a hubby might ;) <3

Sara Ella

January 23, 2017 at 6:09 PM

I love that you share how working with words/language takes you out of your circumstances and I might add, reading your poetry can do that too :) You, my friend, are an inspiration (I keep saying that!) <3

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 11:25 PM

Thank Sara, I am glad it brings you a little happiness <3

Andrea Dietrich

January 23, 2017 at 3:52 PM

awesome end line. That is what MAKES the tanka!!!

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 11:24 PM

I agree, I like my little tanka, thank you Andrea :)

Jan Allison

January 23, 2017 at 8:48 AM

So few lines say so much Darren - despite your difficulties in life your positive attitude shines so brightly my friend and you can climb those mountains if only through your words - but knowing you someone would push you up there! :-) hugs jan xx

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 9:02 AM

Hi Jan :) Yeah, eventually I will get on top of that mountain, and someone will push me there, can't wait. But until then my enormous fantasy will guide me, it makes me happy. HUGS

Chris Green

January 23, 2017 at 8:35 AM

It certainly can make it a lot more tolerable. Nicely expressed my friend.

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 8:41 AM

It really does. For me it opens a dimension to a different world where I can be everything I cannot be in reality. It's perfect, Chris :)

Reason A. Poteet

January 23, 2017 at 8:22 AM

Nice way of looking at the joys of the poet. Great contrast between pain and pleasure. Enjoyed it, Darren.

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 8:26 AM

Indeed, I like that contrast very much. Thank you.

John Herlihy

January 23, 2017 at 8:18 AM

It's amazing what can be captured within the brevity and discipline of a haiku and tanka. Perhaps that is why some of us like these forms so much. Unpacking this one reveals light at the end. (note: 4th line has 8 syllables, not that I am counting). JH

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 8:52 AM

I realize why the 8 syllables.... To me 'poetry' has 2 syllables, but the counter says 3. Languages languages :)

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 8:23 AM

There, changed. Yes, I agree, I especially love the tanka for it allows me to pack an enormous amount of emotions in just a few lines and words. Thank you.

Darren White

January 23, 2017 at 8:19 AM

oops! I'll change that, thank you :)

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