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Fantasy Deletes Pain

Straps around his waist,
And shining armour loosened.
Brittle backbone hurts.
Notepad, pen: poetry waits,
Fantasy deletes all pain

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White Wolf

Date: 1/24/2017 3:42:00 AM

I think I've only ever done one tanka! Too hard basket for me! But you make it read so well and smooth and appear so easily! Love it /|\

Darren White
Date: 1/24/2017 3:44:00 AM

So few words available to bring the message. I love that. Thanks Budgie :)

Claudia Polydoro

Date: 1/23/2017 7:49:00 PM

Nothing like going away from reality when it becomes too much... And losing oneself in poetry is AMAZING... <3 So much said in a few lines... Gread one, Darren <3

Claudia Polydoro
Date: 1/24/2017 3:39:00 AM

Yup... truth ;) hehehe <3

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 11:26:00 PM

It is, isn't it? Nothing beats it.... well... a hubby might ;) <3

Sara Ella

Date: 1/23/2017 6:09:00 PM

I love that you share how working with words/language takes you out of your circumstances and I might add, reading your poetry can do that too :) You, my friend, are an inspiration (I keep saying that!) <3

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 11:25:00 PM

Thank Sara, I am glad it brings you a little happiness <3

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/23/2017 3:52:00 PM

awesome end line. That is what MAKES the tanka!!!

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 11:24:00 PM

I agree, I like my little tanka, thank you Andrea :)

Jan Allison

Date: 1/23/2017 8:48:00 AM

So few lines say so much Darren - despite your difficulties in life your positive attitude shines so brightly my friend and you can climb those mountains if only through your words - but knowing you someone would push you up there! :-) hugs jan xx

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 9:02:00 AM

Hi Jan :) Yeah, eventually I will get on top of that mountain, and someone will push me there, can't wait. But until then my enormous fantasy will guide me, it makes me happy. HUGS

Chris Green

Date: 1/23/2017 8:35:00 AM

It certainly can make it a lot more tolerable. Nicely expressed my friend.

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 8:41:00 AM

It really does. For me it opens a dimension to a different world where I can be everything I cannot be in reality. It's perfect, Chris :)

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 1/23/2017 8:22:00 AM

Nice way of looking at the joys of the poet. Great contrast between pain and pleasure. Enjoyed it, Darren.

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 8:26:00 AM

Indeed, I like that contrast very much. Thank you.

John Herlihy

Date: 1/23/2017 8:18:00 AM

It's amazing what can be captured within the brevity and discipline of a haiku and tanka. Perhaps that is why some of us like these forms so much. Unpacking this one reveals light at the end. (note: 4th line has 8 syllables, not that I am counting). JH

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 8:52:00 AM

I realize why the 8 syllables.... To me 'poetry' has 2 syllables, but the counter says 3. Languages languages :)

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 8:23:00 AM

There, changed. Yes, I agree, I especially love the tanka for it allows me to pack an enormous amount of emotions in just a few lines and words. Thank you.

Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 8:19:00 AM

oops! I'll change that, thank you :)

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