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an ancient city plague by disease the fields painted by fallen knights skeletons in armour coved in debri with a cold fog and lack of moonlight i turn to leave this place of mystery but the trail that lured me in has disappeared from my eyesight what was once a trail of dirt and fallen leaves is now a field of shining armour exposed to the moonlight as the cold air licks at my skin i hear a voice calling me as faint as the breeze it leads me to a scroll that tells of an accent foresight that of a young boy that will one night find a city of deceased and the way in will be closed for eternity and when the night sky has passed out shall come the sunlight for today is the day that boy will die for certainty 21/06/13

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Date: 7/10/2013 7:55:00 PM
WOW, Peter, a daunting and eerie tale. Very captivating all the way through. great imagination and congrats on the well deserved win :)
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Date: 7/9/2013 9:58:00 AM
Peter, Peter a thriller of a story you have weaved. Congrats on your fine win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 7/8/2013 8:38:00 PM
A chilling ending. congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 7/8/2013 6:52:00 AM
Hi peter, really enjoyed reading your fantasy poem, congratulations...cheriexx
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Date: 7/8/2013 5:47:00 AM
Hi Peter welcome to Soup big congrats on placing and Ty for entering my contest Shadow x smiles
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Date: 6/27/2013 4:46:00 PM
Welcome Peter Your fantasy poem is terrific. I am an ex-pat Tasmanian....living in Hawaii now. SuZ
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Date: 6/23/2013 12:07:00 AM
Hello Peter, I see you are Australian, well I live in Australia too, in the city of Campbelltown NSW, but I am actually British, I liked the setting for your poem and your storytelling is excellent, but watch your spelling as it is letting your quality down, please proof read your work for errors, but the rest is fine, all the best. John
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Date: 6/23/2013 6:59:00 AM
oh awesome nice to meet you :) I hope you like Australia! yeah spelling isn't my specialty but I try hah, thanks for the tip and nice words I will try to work on it. and what words did I miss spell so I can fix them??

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