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Family Secrets

Mossy vines served as camouflage for a decaying headstone This was the first time I’d laid eyes on your final resting place In front of me stood a grey granite slab covered in emerald moss Green ivy clung to the stone and snaked round the nearby yew tree It was evident your grave had not been visited for many many years In fact, until ten days ago I didn’t know you existed … A family secret kept hidden from me by my elderly ‘mother’ It wasn’t until her recent death I discovered the real truth At the will reading the lawyer presented me with an envelope Spidery handwriting revealed that my real mother died in childbirth I discovered that I’d been adopted; my real name was Sara James Seeing my original birth certificate for the first time was a huge shock Now I know the reason I felt that I never belonged With my raven hair and pale skin I looked very different from my sister Beth I’d been told I looked like my great aunt and I’d never queried this Now I stand in front of the plot where my real mother is buried I spend an hour weeding, tidying and cleaning the gravestone Rivers of tears run down my face when I finally reveal the inscription Carved in the decaying stone I read Ellen James - died 17th April 1953 aged 33 Fell asleep with her tiny angel Susan James - died 17th April 1953 born sleeping Family secrets kept hidden in the graveyard Sobbing bitter tears I kneel down and leave a red rose For my mother and my twin sister that until today I never knew existed Fictional write for Camouflage me a Poem Contest Sponsored by Broken Wings Theme 1 chosen - Mossy vines served as camouflage for a decaying headstone 08~04~16
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White Avatar
September 5, 2016 at 3:18 AM
A win for you in this contest! Congrats! (Bit late ;-) )
White Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 2:07 AM
Yes. It is heartbreaking and beautiful Jan... So beautiful *sigh*
Allison Avatar
September 5, 2016 at 5:49 AM
Thanks Darren - as you can see I don't write humour all the time! I was really pleased with the way this one turned out - I think the fact I wasn't restricted by syllables or form helped my creativity:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 10:51 PM
Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem and what a great image too !
Allison Avatar
August 15, 2016 at 2:44 PM
I was so delighted to place so well - thanks for an awesome prompt without it the poem would never have been written:-):-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
August 11, 2016 at 6:02 PM
Such a heartbreaking poem-story, Jan, so amazingly written. Congratulations on your fine podium win! 7 Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:34 PM
Thanks Sandra:hugs Jan xx
Roberts Avatar
August 11, 2016 at 12:37 PM
Creative and so well written congratulations... Seren
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:34 PM
Thanks Seren:hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
August 11, 2016 at 8:49 AM
Well written Jan...Congrats on your win
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:36 PM
Thanks Joseph:-)hugs Jan xx
Daniel Avatar
August 11, 2016 at 4:29 AM
This is a heart render, Jan:) Congratulations on a worthy win:) A #7:)
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:36 PM
Thanks Jo:-)hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
August 10, 2016 at 11:16 PM
Jan, this didn't sound fictional, your creative art excelled in this beautiful poem!!! Congratulations on your win!!! Hugs Eve
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:36 PM
Thanks so much Eve I enjoyed the prompt BW gave us:-)hugs Jan xx
Y. Avatar
August 10, 2016 at 10:58 PM
Hi Jan, I knew this was winner when I first saw it. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:37 PM
Thanks Alexis:-)hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
August 10, 2016 at 9:47 PM
Now I gotta go see Carrie's!!(if I haven't already)
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:37 PM
:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
August 10, 2016 at 9:46 PM
wow, Jan, you really thought up quite a tale there!! Very imaginative of you. I did not see the "twin" part coming and I love the way you said, "born sleeping" is that a common thing they say in england? BIG congrats and well deserved.
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:38 PM
Thanks Andrea - I'm not sure if 'born sleeping' is a common phrase I just thought it apt for the poem:-)hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
August 10, 2016 at 9:37 PM
Jan, this is awesome and so worthy of a first place...congrats lady :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:38 PM
Thanks LuLoo:-)hugs Jan xx
Richards Avatar
August 10, 2016 at 8:50 PM
It may be fiction, but you had me believing !! Great piece this is, Jan!
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:39 PM
Thanks Carrie it was a wonderful prompt that BW gave us:-)hugs Jan xx
Raven Avatar
August 8, 2016 at 6:11 AM
Hi Jan, this is a sad yet beautiful write, the sadness itself gives the piece its beauty. This is a fictional write and yet you make it so real. As always, your skill in the poetic arts shines through as always. This write does touch the haert deeply. I do wish you well in the contest Jan. A wonderful write indeed. Excellent content and flow. This is a seven and a definite fave. Hugs....Mike. XX
Allison Avatar
August 12, 2016 at 12:40 PM
Thanks Mike:-)hugs Jan xx
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August 7, 2016 at 4:40 PM
WoW! Jan, this is a good entry for the contest. It was so believable. I felt like you were telling me a deep family secret that happened a long time ago.It was so sad and heartbreaking. I think you just landed a spot on the winners list with this write. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A gigantic seven:-) Alexis
Allison Avatar
August 7, 2016 at 4:50 PM
Thanks Alexis it was a wonderful line prompt and I know Constance likes an emotional poem so I hope she likes my take on the theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Inman Avatar
August 6, 2016 at 1:39 PM
Exquisite write Jan!! Your story drew me in and the headstone epitaph gave me a chill. Beautiful flow with a wonderful eerie quality. Can't say enough about this. Wonderful!
Allison Avatar
August 6, 2016 at 5:10 PM
Thanks so much James I do like to surprise with a more serious write from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx
Murray Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 4:38 PM
Wonderful Jan. Good luck.
Allison Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 7:23 PM
Thanks Jean:-) hugs Jan xx
Babbit Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 2:53 PM
So wonderfully relayed. Some family secrets are kept hidden well; threats often made to those who would tell. Children who know no better, often sharing like an open letter. Sworn to secrecy I was and to betray that ever gives me pause.
Allison Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 7:22 PM
Thanks for dropping by DM:-) hugs Jan xx
Godwin Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 7:58 AM
Your imagination soared with creativity on this one, Jan. An emotional drama unfolds through excellent writing. I'm impressed, love this exceptional write ... CayCay
Allison Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 8:05 AM
Thanks CayCay I know Constance likes sad so I tried to deliver:-) hugs Jan xx
Chircop Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 11:58 PM
A fantastic write Jan.and Im glad its fictional..Nobody wishes to pass from such turmoil. Loved the sad story.A fave.
Allison Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 4:11 AM
Thanks Charma:-) hugs Jan xx
Roberts Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 6:21 PM
Fantastic Jan, a wonderful write......Seren
Allison Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 6:29 PM
Thanks Seren I do hope Broken Wings likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx
Turner Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 5:16 PM
So very sad, Jan. I'm hoping this is pure fiction. I'm like Tim, a little misted.
Allison Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 5:18 PM
Pure fiction Daniel - I do wonder where my muse comes up with these ideas from - she surprises me from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 4:50 PM
Such a sad write Jan. I admit I am misted...
Allison Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 4:51 PM
Thanks Tim - it was a tough line to use as a prompt as I knew it would end up being very sad:-( hugs Jan xx
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