Family Culture

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That's the last place I lived while still at home till my heart sought to journey my birthplace. Indulgence Sea storms, formed riffles, and cold foam. Were dealt crumbs through our life, we needed space. Submissive to the man culture and race; worked every day to feed his family. Treated the familia carelessly Greeting a birthplace with no suffering. Relationship with my identity building, nurturing, and understanding. 1/11/2017 Familia: Spanish for family Indulgence: alcoholism Foam: abuse Dizain rhyme scheme is: a. b. a. b. b. c. c. d. c. d. with a 10 syllable count

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Judith S

Date: 12/12/2017 11:44:00 AM

Great write Eve. Culture is definitely something that is hard to escape. This seems a very difficult style but you made it work so well! :) Best, Judy

Mark Martin

Date: 2/18/2017 12:44:00 PM

Familiar story to many. Congratulations Eve on your win! :-)

Lu Loo

Date: 2/11/2017 1:41:00 PM

This one really made me think- I wasn't sure if it should be sad, or angry? But very though provoking and intense nonetheless. thank you and congrats ;)-luloo

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/12/2017 2:15:00 PM

- A wonderful poem, Eve - "rhyme scheme is: a. B. A. B. B. C. C. D. C. D. With a 10 syllable count" .... for me this is an "alien language" :))) - ... impressive write :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Eve Roper
Date: 1/14/2017 9:50:00 PM

Thank you, Sunshine, was very easy considering the idea of writing with something with some meat in it...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/12/2017 3:03:00 AM

Your artful writing shows clearly your talent in this form dear, Eve!

Chris Green

Date: 1/11/2017 7:07:00 AM

I have never tried this form and probably won't it seems very difficult, but not as difficult as the scene you have created with your words. Though I know things like this happen all of time, they shouldn't. Nicely expressed Eve.

White Wolf

Date: 1/11/2017 2:25:00 AM

What a difficult form! And you did so well. Are you still on Holy days (holidays)! Ha.