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* This was inspired by one of the first short forms I ever wrote *

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     my angel, fallen ...

            gossamer linen, violet lace
                window-dressing body, pressing
                 goddess of unblemished grace
                beckoning - urge reckoning
            clasp me, push me ... down with you.

     close, to see my eyes in yours
 heart of darkness, warm and artless
measured with our carnal cores
 fallowed - soon, unhallowed
     pull me, draw me ... down with you.

            savor sweet, your taste is mine
                greedy swallows fill my hollows
                 faultless form, engorged supine
                whetted - blade unfettered
            cut me, rend me ... down with you.

     pity, fawn to take me in
 I, the frozen quarry, chosen
bartered virtue, ceded sin
 merging - madness surging
     gather me, wrench me ... down with you.

            each dynamic sates a thirst
                a darkened oath devours both
                 raptured sighs so unrehearsed
                spasm - plunging chasm
            drench me, drown me ... down with you.

     painted nails to flay my frame
 stripes of lust, a jealous trust
lesions roused for fervor's flame
 unversed - do your worst
     stain me, rake me ... down with you.

            feral places, once denied
                cognate parts to blackened hearts
                 souls and selves we can't divide
                twisted - double-fisted
            grind me, burn me ... down with you.

     sing to me a siren's wail
 rip the rhyme from all sublime
watch the frenzied portions flail
 disguised - hell, improvised
     smite me, drag me ... down with you.

            all in, my angel ... fallen
                so sweetly, and
                 so deeply
                down.
            with.

     you.







** This is a poetic form I created called “Torridelle”, (not the actual shape, but the rhyme scheme, phrasing and metre). **

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~ 2nd Place ~  in the Poetry Soup "Wow Me" Poetry Contest, Nina Parmenter, Judge & Sponsor.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 8/27/2019 7:11:00 PM
Sensual lines to paint a siren's wail. Congrats on your win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:44:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Jeanne, I'm happy you enjoyed it, Friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/27/2019 8:40:00 AM
This certainly deserves a WOW Greg! Congratulations on your deserving silver medal! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:43:00 AM
Thank you so much, Connie - I'm pleased you liked it! :o) <3
Date: 8/26/2019 9:02:00 PM
Congrats on your high placement in Nina’s contest.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:43:00 AM
Thank you very much, Richard - blessings! :o)
Date: 8/26/2019 5:04:00 PM
WOW sizzling Greg. Congratulations on your win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:42:00 AM
hank you so very much, Georgia - blessings, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/26/2019 4:43:00 PM
darkness calling to darkness... chilling yet alluring. As always WOW!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:42:00 AM
Many kind thanks, PS - so pleased you enjoyed it, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/26/2019 10:23:00 AM
Is it hot in here or is it just me? Sizzle sizzle. Stunning piece Greg! Congratulations on your win! xomo <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:41:00 AM
LOL Thank you so kindly, Mo - blessings! :o)
Date: 8/22/2019 10:49:00 AM
I remember this one, you made some changes right. Still a great write, I always enjoy the internal rhyme, it's a great poetic device, somehow I think I like the other version better, but this one will still win!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:41:00 AM
Yes, indeed, my friend - so happy you liked this one, Brother - many thanks and blessings! :o)
Date: 8/22/2019 8:13:00 AM
forget WOW this is a phwhoarrrwow Greg, what a fabulous sensual poem! I think Nina will LOVE this one:-) hugs Jan xx
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:40:00 AM
Thank you so kindly, Jan, I'm pleased you liked it, Friend! :o) <3
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