fall of stars

Back with Hearty congratulations on your contest win with this beautifully penned poem, Hiya.

Back with congrats on this beauty

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading. What a wonderful write for a wonderful picture/time of the year.  I love this wonderful time of the year. Have a blessed day with your win.............

Hiya, congratulations on your second place win with your wonderfully penned tanka. 🥈

just breathtaking

A glorious tanka. Loved it ❤️

Your poems have such a dreamy quality even when they breathe out disappointment and pain. When you bid the sun to sleep, you feel that you are engaged in the task of summoning stars into your darkened life but never came. In few lines, you have conveyed so much. With deft touches of your pen, you have created a world of darkness where love frails and thins. Great Tanka, dear Hiya. Another FAV.👍

a sweet lament

Beautiful writing 🍂🍁🤎🦌✨

Dear Hiya, I loved that in just a few brief lines, you’ve captured that painful, beautiful feeling of mourning a warmth that never quite arrived, painting stars for a summer that exists only in memory or longing. O' how creative we can be even in our sadness, using our own inner light to paint stars across the dark when the world outside feels cold or incomplete. A dreamy fragment of feeling. Blessings, Daniel

In summer that never came. So eloquent and descriptive. A lovely tanka.🙏

Very poetic and descriptive lines penned accompanied by a nice artwork. Way to go. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. 👏✍️. Sara K.

Through words and exquisitely beautiful images, feelings of love and loss are conveyed here, dear Hiya. I like the poem's title and the picture, too. Both are captivating!😄🌹⭐⭐

You've written a beautiful tanka with a unique style that makes the images very real, dear Hiya. It's about love, and it speaks to the soul, time passing, and a little sadness. There is a clear narrative arc and structure, and the vivid descriptions make the mood very compelling. Best wishes for the contest.

the pathos of life in ruins is so palpable in your piece, hiya...you brilliantly addressed pain through images of ' sleep ' and ' summer that hever came'

A lot of poetic depth shines in your tanka. CayCay

That's a pretty tanka - I like the last line!

I love the way youv presented your tanka dear Hiya, and the way your words flow and the way youv painted imagery of also fall is stunning and unique! Your use of pandora stars is so very creative! I love that especially love youv written "as leaf of love frails... and I paint pandora's s t a r s in summer that never came..." wow! Thats soulfully moving and touching! I felt so much reading that! Youv delivered a tanka worthy of all the accolades! Best wishes ~ sending yu light always 🧜‍♀️ 🧚

Hiya you use brilliant creative imagery to visually and emotionally anchor the poem: Visual spacing stretches out the letters in "f a l l" and "s t a r s" to mimic the physical drifting of autumn leaves and the distant, scattered nature of the night sky. Using "frails" as an action word captures the heartbreaking process of love actively becoming brittle and breaking apart. Painting Pandora's stars suggests the speaker is trying to manually recreate the lingering hope famously left at the bottom of Pandora's box.