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Author's Notes: "Fall of Man," is a specialty poem, a Double Dactyl, that I completed on August 13, 2017. I composed this poem using the poetic structural intensity of this type of format to highlight the thematic temptation articulated by the great seventeenth-century English poet, John Milton, in his famous epic classical poem: "Paradise Lost." Milton published this renown masterpiece epic poem in 1667. The overarching theme of this gigantic Blank Verse poem is the "fall of man" resultant from the temptation of Adam and Eve in the Garden of Eden as they proceeded to eat the fruit of the legendary "Tree of Knowledge of Good and Evil." This shameful act by Adam and Eve, of course, leads to their banishment from the garden. Because of this incident, greater humanity, is left with continuously seeking to return to a "state of godliness" that existed before the ultimate disobedient act of Adam and Eve. It's truly amazing how Milton orchestrated the entirety of his in-depth effort in building out the integral sub-themes of his epic tour de force effort here centered around the principal concept of the "fall of man," hence, the "fall of mankind" in general, from God's paradise. (Gary Bateman - August 13, 2017) (Double Dactyl)

Categories: allegory, betrayal, god, introspection, metaphor, spiritual, and symbolism.

Fall of Man Adam and Eve John Milton Don’t eat that fruit Thought they could. Tree of Knowledge Insubordination Downfall occurs . . . “Evil, be thou my good.” Gary Bateman, Copyright © All Rights Reserved, August 13, 2017 (Double Dactyl)

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Arturo Michael

Date: 1/1/2018 9:46:00 AM

Happy New Year Gary... A bite of the apple to start the show, digestion is full of chemical reactions, decarding the wasteful retaining only the nutritious... A poem of mystery ... All the best

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/1/2018 10:18:00 AM

Hello Arturo, Happy New Year wishes to you as well!! I see you found my "Fall of Man" dactyl write from last year. Yes, in line with Milton, I do think Adam and Eve got more than they bargained for with bite of that apple!! Thanks for your read and comment on this specialty write of mine!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 8/29/2017 7:13:00 PM

Excellence as usual from your golden pen, Gary. The distillation of eternal truths into such small concentrated doses of verse is astounding. Your pen breaths the virtues of truth. Magnificent write. Love and peace.

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/30/2017 11:31:00 AM

Hello Freddie!! Thanks for your read here and your very kind words. I'm very pleased that enjoyed the focus of my Double Dactyl poem here. John Milton had so much to say in "Paradise Lost." At least here, I was able to hone in on the direct theme he had written about in great length. Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 8/26/2017 12:35:00 PM

Wow....what a beautifully penned poem. I love the read of this gem. Brilliant post.

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/26/2017 3:43:00 PM

Afolabi, Thanks for your note here. Yes, Dactyl writes are both very focused and intense by the nature of how they are constructed. I'm pleased you enjoyed it. Best Wishes, Gary

Ovidiu Bocsa

Date: 8/21/2017 8:12:00 AM

Again,with this poem, you regain the Paradise.The poetical question is how could we eat, and in the same time keep the apple? Like in the case of great authors, we are satisfied just to taste their verses. Best regards.

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/23/2017 9:46:00 AM

Hello Ovidiu, Thanks for your read here and for your insightful comment. Great Observation. In reality, however, they did eat the fruit (the apple), which meant their ultimate act of disobedience or insubordination was realized. Although, "evil" had now been embraced along with the original "good." Such is mankind's circumstance today, although Paradise had been regained. The logic-train of the great authors is always challenging and interesting. Cheers and Best, Gary

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/17/2017 7:07:00 AM

I love this one short but profoundly meaningful! And as always, your works are breathtaking and soulful. God bless dear friend Gary :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/17/2017 7:22:00 AM

Hello Kina, Thanks for your note here and for your gracious comments. Always appreciated!! Best Always, Gary

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/17/2017 6:22:00 AM

- So simple ... and so beautifully written, dear Gary - Best wishes to you and Ingrid - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/17/2017 7:14:00 AM

Hello Anne-Lise, Thanks for your note and read here. I did write this one with some definite focus. Glad you liked it!! Cheer and Best, Gary

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 8/15/2017 12:45:00 PM

Hi G!:)) A very beautiful, excellent, spiritual poem, you've penned here my very dear friend Gary.Just awesome!Very beautifully composed in the Dactyl Verse style.Outstanding piece!Loved reading your notes, G:)Well done!I enjoyed it all! Golden pen!A 7 + + + !A fav.Sending my love n' prayers to you and Ingrid, as always:))Please take very good care of each other always.All the best to you both always G! Spill ink!:))Wishing you a very lovely week!In His light God bless you always!:))D

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/17/2017 7:19:00 AM

Hi D! Always a great pleasure to hear from you, and I really appreciate your comments and observations of my Dactyl-style write very much! I'm pleased that you liked it, and thanks for the TR/FAV. You are very gracious for sure. Spill Ink too! Continued best wishes from Ingrid and me! Cheers and Best, G!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/14/2017 7:34:00 PM

it sings out in its entirety beautifully painted dear gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/17/2017 7:21:00 AM

Thanks Liam Mate!! I'm pleased very much that you like this particular specialty-write. Best Always, Gary

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/13/2017 3:08:00 PM

A powerful message in this piece Gary. I feel it was meant to be that we explore knowledge which is why we were given free will. The fall of man is war! : )

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/14/2017 11:12:00 AM

Hello Connie, Thanks very much for your great note here, and for your read. Yes, for sure, by God's grace we've all been given this "Free Will" and it's at the center of all that we do as we explore knowledge and the impact of certain human concepts. And, most certainly, the fall of man is "war" and it appears this is repeated lesson that mankind never seems to get right!! We can only hope and pray!! Cheers and Best Always, Gary

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/13/2017 5:30:00 AM

A profound short poem that sends an everlasting message! The question raised here mein freund, Gary ist wie ich versteche, is evil real evil? Another poem should be written to explain that! I have to ponder now on this philosophical question my friend! Superb writing!PS: The fallen Man lives his sin as though his good! What a tragedy! What magnitude of ignorance! Your poem deeper becomes as the analysis proceeds my friend! Wunderbar!

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/14/2017 10:30:00 AM

Hallo Herr Professor!! Demetrios, Ich bedanke mich sehr fuer deinen Kommentar hier. Thanks too for your read and all of the very insightful comments you've made regarding "Fall of Man." This is one that I had been wanting to write for quite a while. Per your reply here, I've added your question about "Is Evil Real Evil?" to my writing task list. I will certainly consider it, and perhaps we can talk further via e-mail about it very soon. You're certainly right about what you say concerning the Fallen Man in his Earth-centric mortal coil. I'm glad I stimulated some further discussion with this special write. Best Wishes to you from Ingrid and me!! Gary