Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Kimo

Fall

Hot sun-kissed days--- fled and rolled far away. . . . 
Crisp coolness saturates air
Brink to life and decay?

Pumpkins so yellow; melons so mellow
Gnomes appear; fat harvest fills
Crown AUTUMN: queen of year!

Dancing wind ~ jazzy blows, leaves on branches. . . .
Rainbow shower foliage
Trumpet dazzle of death?


(c)Olive Eloisa
7:14pm
June 17, 2014

CONTEST NAME: 1 in 4: Choose your Season, Choose Your Form 
SPONSOR: ANDREA DIETRICH
placed 6th .. :D

** made little change to my third line after judging to correct the wrong syllable count.. :D!

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James Fraser December 9, 2014 at 1:03 PM The Fall is my favourite season Olive, and you've portrayed it wonderfully through your words, James :)

Donna Jones June 30, 2014 at 5:48 PM Outstanding....congratulations.. :-)

Jan Allison June 29, 2014 at 4:55 PM congratulations on your win for this fine poem. hugs jan xxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:55 PM Thank you Jan.. :)

Nette Onclaud June 29, 2014 at 4:02 PM what an upbeat entry; i like, eloi.. cheers to you on your fine win.. hugggs Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:49 PM thanks Nette. :)

Pandita Sietesantos June 29, 2014 at 11:23 AM Hi Olive, this is such a beautifully descriptive write! Huge congratulations to you on your great win! Warmest regards. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:44 PM HUGE CONGRATULATIONS TOO Pandita.. :D thanks much. :D

Arlene Smith June 29, 2014 at 9:34 AM congrats on a great win, Olive... I love the original imagery here.. Hugs.. Arlene Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:41 PM thank you Arlene.. :D

Elaine George June 29, 2014 at 6:21 AM Beautiful kimo, Olive. Many congrats on your win. Elaine Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:05 PM Thank you Elaine..:) GBU

Paul Callus June 29, 2014 at 4:44 AM Congratulations!! Olive_eloi :)) cake and tea for you:)) // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:05 PM Thank you..:) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 6:04 PM Thanks I love the cakes and tea..:)

Andrea Dietrich June 28, 2014 at 11:01 PM Olive, this is a very exciting one for the fall! Great formatting of the lines with bold print here and there. One little thing, your third line was one syllable over the count. nonetheless, an awesome poem. Congrats for your win. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 29, 2014 at 2:57 AM Oh Andrea :O good you still placed me despite that.. :O?!!! thanks much .. :D! God bless you.. :) yes must be 6 syllables.. :O

Justin Bordner June 20, 2014 at 8:37 PM Very wild spirit in this charming poem. Where I live Autumn is a sacred season, with mystery and mirth for all whom prepare for the lovely pain of Winter." Trumpet dazzle of death..." this is serious good poetry, produces fantastic image, feeling and meaning Olive. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 21, 2014 at 4:25 AM hahaha.. :) lil wild only :D yes that what I want readers feel in this write.. :D mytery and mirth.. :)

Connie Marcum Wong June 18, 2014 at 4:15 PM A beautiful Kimo you have created here! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 18, 2014 at 4:58 PM thank you Connie. :) GBU

Paul Callus June 18, 2014 at 4:00 PM Hi Olive_eloi! I am much impressed by your kimo; you have to paint this on canvas too! I judge this as a winner! gl // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 18, 2014 at 4:58 PM thanks much.. :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 18, 2014 at 4:57 PM weee.. :) well why not Paul if im given the chance.. :) love to draw sometimes anyway. :)

Tim Smith June 17, 2014 at 4:21 PM I love the fall Olive and you describe it eloquently.....Hugs Tim Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 17, 2014 at 5:22 PM Thank you Tim as always.. :D