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Faint

Amidst the smog
That wraps your city
Clogging the view
above the horizon
Of skies beauty
There is still one star left
that you see
And in your heart's ear
it whisper:
Amidst the intense smoke
that hids the multitude
Of other
hope and light giving company
I'm still here
to light and guide you
On your way
Yet I may be so faint
But the vision of your soul sees
that this faint light
is enough
To lit extinguished hope
to blaze again
in your cold heart!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 7/30/2010 1:06:00 PM
Good use of imagery to convey your thoughts in this poem. I like the hope in the 6th line. Keep on writing!!! Karen
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Date: 7/26/2010 7:31:00 PM
Always a glimmer of hope in the darkest of times. Great message in this one. I enjoyed your work tonight. LUv,Andrea
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Date: 7/24/2010 4:37:00 PM
Enjoyed reading this passionate write Juan. Keep the pen flowing. Thank you for your kind comments. God Bless Phyl
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Date: 7/24/2010 11:05:00 AM
A very inspiring write, Juan :) -- really uplifting to know that even faint light is enough-- very nice! & maraming salamat sa mga comment mo! Hindi ako marunong mag-Bisaya though-- pero ba't di mo-try na i-post dito? ^_^ Sobrang kakatuwa na may Pinoy din dito na naiintindihan yung sulat ko :)-- thanks so much again for your lovely comments-- keep writing & inspiring Juan ^_^ -- nikko :)
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Date: 7/24/2010 8:55:00 AM
Lovely written, Juan! Y muchas gracias por tus comentarios! Have a nice Sunday!---Gert
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Date: 7/24/2010 7:17:00 AM
A romantic poem with a modern twist (smog), ending with hope:)
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Date: 7/24/2010 3:56:00 AM
This goes tmfvs,it is written so beautifully and I love the message it carries,Very romantic and even if a fainting light,it whispers so hopeful!lovely!C.C.
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Date: 7/23/2010 11:42:00 AM
Faithful is the name, right? The warm heart is to be cherished no matter how foolish. Love, Dave
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Date: 7/23/2010 7:24:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your poetry this morning Juan. I will be away for the weekend and will be back to read Monday. May you have a wonderful weekend filled with love and inspiration. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/23/2010 7:18:00 AM
Wow! So expressive and descriptive ...Filled with emotion..Let the gift of the poet continue to flow your pen of expressiveness..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..SK
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Date: 7/23/2010 6:07:00 AM
To lit extinguished hope... nice expression. enjoyed it
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Date: 7/23/2010 5:56:00 AM
enjoyed this sarah x
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