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Fading

Written: September 19, 2023

Better pass boldly into that other world, in the full glory of some passion, than fade and wither dismally with age. James Joyce

Fragmented Verse: is a rhyme form created by Constance la France
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                        As days fade, dimming their hissing light.
            A whisper among aspens is overheard.
Perishable eyes blink—ephemeral and slight.
Angels framed a scarlet sky—tempers blurred.
                        Dawn's advent is tomorrow's embrace.
The transient is thawing, leaving no trace.
As time expands, a void of silence will brace.
      Akin to a puddle that sinks with the dawn dew.
            But bewitchery bleach, bolt broad bias blue?
                        Paths that diverge fade away as ripples in view.
Every day, it fades quickly but remains in sight.
            Fade, sporadic, and shallow as a stroll preferred.
      The unstoppable specter of time is in the face.
            Love and unity shape life, not time spent anew.

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Constance La France October 9, 2023 at 2:27 PM Sotto, excellent writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, I love the image, music and quote, Constance

Andrea Dietrich September 21, 2023 at 12:39 PM Very very nice writing. Sophisticated.

Speaks Volumes September 21, 2023 at 8:25 AM Resplendent phrases adorn beautiful thoughts and powerful emotions, What a wonderful poem. The composing of this poem can be likened to the creating of a masterpiece. Well done my dear friend. I am also a huge fan of Tim Minchin.

Anne-Lise Andresen September 21, 2023 at 4:52 AM - "Akin to a puddle that sinks with the dawn dew" ... great ... - Line of truth in the end says it all : "Love and unity shape life, not time spent anew" - Beautiful ... and wise, Las :) - hugs

Susan Ashley September 20, 2023 at 6:11 PM Dear Lasaad, your lyrical, beautiful imagery is framed perfectly in the Fragmented verse form. A deep, rich dramatic poem composed with rhythmic rhymes and poetic finesse. I especially admired " A whisper among aspens is overheard" and "Love and unity shape life" - so true! Exquisite writing! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands September 20, 2023 at 11:53 AM Beautiful poem. Well written :)

Jay Narain September 20, 2023 at 10:46 AM Great poem, love the quote.

Christina Bowring September 20, 2023 at 8:54 AM This is such a gorgeous read dear Sotto. So many sublime poetic lines,’Angels framed a scarlet sky’, ‘akin to a puddle that sinks with the dawn dew’. Glorious! So love the last concluding line as well. This new form suits your immense poetic talent so well. Loved it! Thank you for sharing. Blessings go to you.

Ink Empress September 20, 2023 at 7:52 AM Oh this form is beautiful to read, i wish I knew how to do it, sotto my friend this is one of my fave poems by you so far, the alliterations and your choice of words and imagery and how well this flows is beyond impeccable and so captivating. And as always your rhymes are so sublime and gorgeous! I always admire them: i especially loved “ love and unity shape life” so true! “ angels framed a scarlet sky” your way with words is so creative and surreal! So touching! A fave for me

Hiya Sharma September 20, 2023 at 7:25 AM This is absolutely a phenomenal take for the contest, dear Sotto. I'm awestruck by your impeccable ability to weave emotions, whilst flowing making this write flow so meticulously. Your word combinations, alliteration, rhymes and tones here are so brilliant and so evocative are these lines "Perishable eyes blink-ephemeral and slight", "Angels framed a scarlet sky-tempers blurred.","Paths that diverge fade away as ripples in view" Wonderfully you've conveyed deep feelings here, loved reading this

Vijay Pandit September 20, 2023 at 6:01 AM I like the quote at the top of your poem--for it gave you a fine inspiration to compose this poem, my friend. Splendid images throughout adorn your poem, Lasaad.