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Existence

Life is music that drifts in open spaces sometimes a brash crescendo that brims with the fullness of now when stories break from narrow, rigid scripts stifling random routine Life is free wheeling inventiveness peacockish a feathered tapestry parading like a wedding dress down the aisle Sometimes life is a ping pong bounce of sorrow giant ball that blurs the sky that covers our eyes a fog creeping into ruined places Life is a tumble of forces a counterpoint of malice and joy that goes in an unexpected direction like the connective chords of love an airy drift amplified in the ringing rush of time Poem composed: July 2/2022

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Laura Leiser

Date: 4/26/2023 10:23:00 AM

Wow, your metaphors are super creative and thought provoking, Brian! You are very talented and this will be a fav for me! :)

Brian Sambourne
Date: 4/26/2023 12:01:00 PM

Greetings Laura My appreciation for you positive appraisal of my poem. I do try to write similes and metaphors with a creative bend. Thanks immensely. Cheers Brian

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/15/2022 8:47:00 AM

Awesome and interesting free verse. Congrats for your win.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 12/15/2022 10:55:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. Very thoughtful of you to post an affirmative note on my submission. Be well. Sincerest regards, Brian

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/26/2022 10:39:00 PM

Life is full of wonderous poetry, like Brian Sambourne's!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/27/2022 6:56:00 AM

Greetings Harry, Thanks very much for the encouraging message. Much appreciated. I hope that you are keeping well + writing (still) with flair. Cheers Brian

Mark Massey

Date: 11/26/2022 7:51:00 AM

A couple of great metaphors here, Brian. This is a very well written description of MY LIFE !! Well done and congrats.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/26/2022 7:54:00 AM

Hello Mark, Thanks very much for the thumbs up on my poem. I hope that your life is settled on the grand side. Cheers, Brian

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/25/2022 9:47:00 AM

Dear Brian, this is yet another shining example of why you are one of my favorite poets on this site. Your creativity is ever apparent in your imaginative use of striking metaphors that are just so stirring and exciting to my poet's heart. Your artistry elevates words into the realm of a thoughtful masterwork able to exist in a fulfilling life of its own. Another fav! Your poetic gift is treasured and admired, my friend. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. It is a wonderful honor to share the podium with you once again. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/25/2022 10:03:00 AM

Dear Susan, As poet of exemplary work, I sincerely thank your acknowledgement of my submission. You graciously support many poets on this site + your words certainly bring encouragement + joy. Be well + bountiful holidays to you + your family. Sincerely Brian

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/24/2022 9:32:00 AM

a wow of a free verse poem, Brian. Congrats for the win

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/24/2022 11:07:00 AM

Many thanks, Andrea, for your visit + congratulations. Happy Thanksgiving. Brian

Mark Toney

Date: 11/24/2022 8:37:00 AM

Brian, love your thought-provoking metaphors describing what "Life is." I also appreciate your use of the word "Sometimes" when describing the "ping pong bounce of sorrow," cuz it ain't all bad, yeah? Congratulations on your win on Mile 20 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 21 has already started. Also, check out my blog post to view your current standing in the Marathon.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/24/2022 11:09:00 AM

Greetings Mark, Thank you for the placement in your contest. As you well note, life is a mixed bag of bon bons + coal. We savor what we can in this all too brief existence. Cheers Brian

Olabosoye Wemimo Olaoluwa

Date: 10/10/2022 9:50:00 PM

Superb imagery well portrayed with simple words to captured awesome themes relating to the subject matter without drifting off readers'minds. Thanks for sharing with us

Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/11/2022 6:55:00 AM

Thank you very much Olabosoye for your thoughtful message + visit to my portfolio. I hope that you are well. Sincerely, Brian

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 7/20/2022 4:27:00 PM

Hi Brian Astounding imagery. I very much admire your excellence with expressing movement! Poem shimmers with gusto!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/20/2022 5:00:00 PM

Thank you, Sigrid. Very thoughtful of you to leave such an uplifting message. It made my day. With appreciation, Brian

Anil Deo

Date: 7/16/2022 6:34:00 AM

Superlative. O Brian, your gifts & empathy, too, shine here. Stanza 2 is a hzrd-2- narrow down favorite. Shalom shalom. And ... I love how u find moments to encourage menostracized poets. A

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/16/2022 12:44:00 PM

My appreciation for your affirmative response to my poem, Anil. I am gladdened that you especially liked stanza 2. Be well. Brian

Thomas Wells

Date: 7/14/2022 8:37:00 PM

This poem has some great metaphors and is so full of life itself. I enjoyed the free-floating bounce from one stanza to the next! Well done, Brian.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/14/2022 9:11:00 PM

Thank you, Thomas. It was an enjoyable topic to contemplate what life is, though I veered from the contemptible nature of war + violence that so mars existence. Sincere good wishes, Brian

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/3/2022 6:47:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your contest entry. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Your visits to my page are encouraging. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/3/2022 7:02:00 AM

Hello Sara. One never knows how an evaluator perceives a poet's submissions. I thank you for your affirmative comments. Sincerely, Brian

Karen Jones

Date: 7/2/2022 7:27:00 PM

Nicely penned. Good luck in the contest.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/2/2022 9:37:00 PM

Thank you, Karen, for your thoughtful, encouraging comment. Be well. Brian

Susan Woodrow

Date: 7/2/2022 7:25:00 PM

Such unique lines of life’s imagery..there’s existence then there’s amplified life .. love the ending that ties in with your musical start… very lovely read :)

Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/2/2022 8:15:00 PM

Greetings Susan, As always, you are an astute reader catching the various strands that I hope to connect in my small piece. Thank you for your note. Be well. Brian