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sapphire blue velvet
punctuated by stars
heavens above

10th June 2015

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Skat A

Date: 9/8/2015 2:14:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on having your poem featured on the home page. **SKAT**

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 2:25:00 PM

Thanks Skat I really love the imagery here:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Dom

Date: 6/13/2015 10:55:00 PM

I like the word 'evening', it sounds relaxing. What an image - must be desert skyline? - velvet and punctuated come together nicely.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/14/2015 8:09:00 AM

Thanks Michael I am so pleased with the way this poem turned out:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/12/2015 6:00:00 PM

lovely Jan good use of punctuated hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 6:07:00 PM

Thanks Shadow i am really pleased with this poem and the lovely comments I have received:-) Hugs jan xx

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 6/12/2015 5:24:00 AM

This is lovely Jan, the photograph of a star studded sky is a perfect companion to your haiku. Yes, 'punctuated by stars' is a line worth remembering~Delice

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 2:44:00 PM

Thank you so much i am really delighted with the lovely comments I've had for this poem:-) I am to do a talk on 'creative writing' at school and have been asked to challenge the students to write haiku - thought this might inspire them:-) hugs Jan xx

Sneha Rv

Date: 6/11/2015 3:47:00 AM

This is so amazing!! I LOVED how you used 'punctuated'!! :) :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2015 4:12:00 AM

I am really proud of this one Sneha - I have to do another talk on creative writing for our sixth former's and have been asked to set them a challenge of writing a haiku - I hope this inspires them:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sneha Nair

Date: 6/11/2015 1:22:00 AM

superb jan,imagery is so excellent

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2015 1:28:00 AM

thanks so much Sneha I do appreciate your comment:-) Hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 6/10/2015 7:03:00 PM

Beautiful haiku, Jan. Great imagery. hugs! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2015 1:27:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim i am really happy with this one:-) hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 6/10/2015 5:04:00 PM

So love looking up at a starry night in wonder who's looking back at me, hence I smile, James xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 5:20:00 PM

I am sure more than the stars are smiling at you James:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/10/2015 3:03:00 PM

Jan, I love this haiku! My reaction to the 3rd line was exactly like Monterey's. I also love the picture....somehow reminds me of "Baci"...the Italian way to say 'I love you'. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 3:12:00 PM

lol Paul don't tempt me with chocolate lol. I wrote this when i was at the blues festival but as I don't like to flood the site with too many poems unless a contest is I have held it back. I am really pleased with it and the responses I have been getting:-) Hugs jan xx

Monterey Sirak

Date: 6/10/2015 6:20:00 AM

This is lovely. I love the last line. It can be taken as an exclamation, like uttering oh my gosh, or as a simple statement that heaven is right above us.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 6:29:00 AM

Very true Monterary, I deliberately left it open for your own interpretation as it can be seen both ways. Thank you for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan:-) xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/9/2015 11:24:00 PM

the beauty of a night sky wrapped in a 'ku, jan... come visit, miss you!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 1:19:00 AM

I do drop by and comment ... the page for you is very distorted I wonder if this is the reason my comments are showing:-( Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/9/2015 10:20:00 PM

A beautiful picture Jan....I love sitting out under a star lit night.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 1:18:00 AM

Me too Tim but not when their is a meteor shower and you wait for hours and see one lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/9/2015 7:58:00 PM

a beautiful poem to accompany that picture, jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 1:15:00 AM

Thanks Ilene I wrote it a couple of weeks ago:-) Hugs jan xx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 6/9/2015 6:15:00 PM

Ya got me with that one...love the "sapphire blue velvet"; blue is my favorite color. Beautiful Haiku.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2015 6:18:00 PM

I have always wanted a Ceylon sapphire ring - maybe one day - not midnight dark blue but the colour above:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/9/2015 6:00:00 PM

I just love that middle line and the picture is amazing, Jan!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2015 6:05:00 PM

oh thanks so much Andrea I am glad you approve - I wrote this a few weeks ago when I was at the blues weekend:-) I think i am finally getting the show not tell aspect:-) hugs jan xx

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