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Dusky skies tinged with orange purple and lilac hues as sun slips behind h o r i z o n Transfixed by natures beauty my worries d r i f t away As day turns to night I’m wrapped in a blanket of moonbeams and starlight Pick-A-Title, Vol 17 - Yalto - Poetry Contest Sponsored By Edward Ibeh Chosen title 2 - Evenfall 3,4,2,4,5,3,2,3,2,3,3,5,6,1,5 syllables checked with soup counter 05/12/20

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Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/23/2020 7:01:00 PM

Congratulations on your win again Jan :)

John Hamilton

Date: 5/23/2020 1:12:00 PM

This was an amazing read Jan, so glad you entered this, congrats on a great shared 3rd place in this difficult to judge contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/23/2020 1:27:00 PM

Thanks John its a poem I am very proud of - some here think i just write lightweight poems so hopefully with this they can see there is more to me that just a poop poet:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/22/2020 2:09:00 AM

Fantastic verse, Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 5/23/2020 1:24:00 PM

thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/20/2020 3:14:00 PM

I love the layout and your poem Jan! I am so happy that this is a first place winner for you. Congratulations! Blessings xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 3:26:00 PM

thanks Connie, a little proof I can write a decent poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 5/20/2020 3:07:00 PM

I love the creativity of the layout and beautiful imagery, Jan. You have mastered this form...congrats on your win! xx Rhonda

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 3:26:00 PM

thanks Rhonda I have come a long long way since I wrote my first poem back in Nov 2013!:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/20/2020 1:36:00 PM

Such a peaceful description of twilight, Jan. And the layout for the poem is really creative! Congratulations on your winning placement. BTW - is this a picture taken from your home?

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 1:52:00 PM

We have many set set pictures we have taken but this one was from the web, it suited the poem so well:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt

Date: 5/20/2020 10:32:00 AM

Such a quieting effect your poem has, lovely in its colors, form, and soft words. Beautiful win for you, dear Jan. Congrats! Hugs ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 1:51:00 PM

Thanks so much John I am grinning like a cheshire cat:-) hugs Jan xx

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/20/2020 7:50:00 AM

This is beautiful and the layout is creative and suits the theme. Well composed Jan. Congratulations :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 1:51:00 PM

thanks Aditi:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2020 7:39:00 AM

Love how you laid this Yalto out, dear Jan! You make us see your sky with words and form. Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 1:49:00 PM

thanks Kim I am so delighted:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ibeh

Date: 5/20/2020 6:19:00 AM

Heartiest congratulations on winning first place in my contest, Jan:-) Gorgeous poem, in every way! My personal favorite of the bunch!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2020 1:49:00 PM

aww thanks Edward I am not usually this 'creative' in my lay out of the poem but by looking at your examples you inspired me to try. your comment has left me with a huge smile thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 5/14/2020 3:29:00 PM

Such a lovely picture you paint here Jan, full of colour and great expression. Keep safe, Gordon

Jan Allison
Date: 5/14/2020 3:38:00 PM

thanks Gordon all good here:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/13/2020 11:12:00 PM

This feels so calming with lovely imagery Jan. I have never written one of these. I bet it will do well. xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 5/14/2020 9:26:00 AM

I had fun writing a more serious poem Connie and being creative with the lay out:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 5/13/2020 4:21:00 PM

Ah yes. The climate near the equater is something to dream about, but it's got nothing on twilight skies. Gorgeousness. xomo

Jan Allison
Date: 5/13/2020 5:09:00 PM

thanks Mo:-) am proud of this one:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 5/13/2020 10:06:00 AM

Fantastic!! The poem, the layout, and a soothing good night. Beautifully done Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 5/13/2020 12:10:00 PM

Thanks John, I appreciate your comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/12/2020 8:09:00 PM

well, aside from humor this mellow side of you enthralls, jan!... nice layout , too!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/13/2020 12:10:00 PM

Thanks Nette,I much prefer humour its rare for me to do something so creative:-) hugs Jan xx

James Peranteau

Date: 5/12/2020 6:12:00 PM

The whole artistic capture was invigorating dear poet! Have a wonderful week Jan...much love, james

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 6:19:00 PM

thanks so much James, good to see you back on soup:-) hugs Jan xx

Ann Gilmour

Date: 5/12/2020 6:01:00 PM

Your words are as stunning as the photo dear Jan and express the sheer beauty of this time of the day ~ I love your last stanza particularly and your layout is so cool... with kindest thoughts Ann xx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 6:19:00 PM

thanks so much Ann it is rare for me to be so creative am far more comfortable writing silly poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/12/2020 4:59:00 PM

I love how you played with your lines. I too chose this picture. I shall have to try to do cool formatting like you did too!! Great job, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 5:18:00 PM

thanks Andrea its rare for me to be so creative lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 5/12/2020 2:15:00 PM

Aye, enjoy the unique view whilst you can as the industrial nations will ensure the return of smog! Nicely done, Jan! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 2:19:00 PM

we are very lucky here Rico, never get smog and we have very little light pollution so its ideal for star gazing:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/12/2020 12:32:00 PM

- So beautifully written, Jan ... luck in the contest :) - Here in our new home we have the world's most beautiful sunset :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 12:40:00 PM

aww Anne Lise you must be so happy to be there and connected to the internet and back on soup oh happy days!!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani

Date: 5/12/2020 8:43:00 AM

Jan, very well described, the different hues and mood at dusk. GL in contest. Mohan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 11:01:00 AM

Thanks Mohan:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 5/12/2020 7:59:00 AM

I haven't read the premise for this contest, but whatever it is isn't necessary to enjoy the vision you present with your words. "wrapped in a blanket of moonbeams and starlight"... seems to fit just right with 'evenfall.'

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 8:02:00 AM

Thanks so much Lin, we had a choice of 5 titles and have to write to a certain syllable count ... not a poop poem for once lol:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/12/2020 7:44:00 AM

A lovely part of the day when the sun is fading and the air cools down. Very creative layout. Good luck Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 7:49:00 AM

Thanks Tom probably surprise folk I don't always write poop poems lol, am pleased with the way this one turned out:-) hugs Jan xx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/12/2020 7:16:00 AM

WOW! This is so very beautiful, Jan. A TOP win for you!!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/12/2020 7:25:00 AM

aww thanks Vijay, I hope my interpretation of Evenfall is accurate its not a term I am familiar with. your comment is so sweet thank you:-) hugs jan xx