Evenfall

evenfall
clad in dark green.
            sable,
    outflanking she.
gray wispy clouds flee;
        moonglow slight.
          the wolf,
  silently
present.
    present, his
                 aroused eyes
   shushing irises
long hair, leaves on canvas
                                howl.
dark brush brightens moon.


5/7/2020
Pick-A-Title, Vol 17 - Yalto - Poetry Contest
Yalto Form:  3,4,2,4,5,3,2,3,2,3,3,5,  6,1,5 syllables.
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Eve Roper

Date: 5/22/2020 2:16:00 AM

Great imagery and verse, Kim, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/20/2020 3:38:00 PM

This is so unique and lovely Kim! Congratulations on your win! Blessings xxoo

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/21/2020 4:26:00 PM

Thank you, Connie!

John Watt

Date: 5/20/2020 10:39:00 AM

So evocative of the sights and sounds and feel of dusk and nightfall. Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/21/2020 4:25:00 PM

Thanks so much, John!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/20/2020 8:31:00 AM

Beautiful imagery, Kim--Congrats on your win.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/21/2020 4:25:00 PM

Thank you, Vijay!

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/20/2020 8:08:00 AM

Love the images in your poem. They portray such real pictures! Congratulations Kim :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/20/2020 8:09:00 AM

Thank you, Aditi!

Edward Ibeh

Date: 5/20/2020 6:46:00 AM

Heartiest congratulations on winning my contest with this superb Yalto, Kim;-) Beautiful imagery!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/20/2020 7:35:00 AM

Thank you so much, Edward! You know I enjoy the Yalto form! Hugs...Kim

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/7/2020 9:33:00 PM

Fascinating images your poem conjures (and the formatting makes it look like those helicopter-seeds in a twirl as they fall towards the ground). The most dramatic part in the poem for me was the "aroused eyes shushing irises" ... it evokes a sudden stillness and paints the wolf in a majestic light. I keep meaning to try this zany form and keep forgetting!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/7/2020 9:35:00 PM

Thank you, Timothy! I appreciate your comments.