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Eternity Radiance

I believe, the jewel of eternity radiance 
When the sun rays of nothingness fall on, it is brighter than the daylight
With the moon beams of renouncing, the golden silver rays floods through out
Glittering the path everyone search in everywhere
When the sun rays of nothingness fall on, it is brighter than the daylight
Serenity faces glow with the reflecting rays 
Glittering the path everyone search in everywhere
In the mountain of truth, higher than Everest if measured
Serenity faces glow with the reflecting rays
With the moon beams of renouncing, the golden silver rays floods throughout
In the mountain of truth, higher than Everest if measured
Glittering the path everyone search in everywhere
The searches souls enlighten "The Eternal Happiness"
I believe the jewel of eternity radiance.




I need to find out how I have done this. My first attempt.

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/18/2013 6:56:00 PM

I wrote my first Pantoum because of you. You are right it is a difficult form.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/18/2013 6:00:00 PM

I am not familiar with this for but found it very interesting. It looks difficult, I will have to look it up to get a better understanding. I enjoyed your poem very much, I see you are a spiritual person. Continue seeking you will not end up empty handed.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/17/2013 11:59:00 PM

Pantoum can be tricky... but I like the way the form carries out thoughts. Each line is repeated twice... the trick is making the second appearance feel like it's saying something different. I did notice, towards the end, I think the pattern got a bit jumbled... but the material itself is enchanting (maybe next time it might be easier having shorter lines). I'll be looking out for your name...

Manel Gunatillake
Date: 5/18/2013 12:59:00 AM

Thank you very encouraging.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 5/14/2013 9:13:00 PM

A lovely subject for a pantoum. Did you enjoy this experience of writing a Pantoum?

Manel Gunatillake
Date: 5/15/2013 12:31:00 AM

I guess so. but my verse 3 got mixed up there i should have 2 new thoughts. instead i have repeated C and D. I 'll try another one. Thank you very much. For the sight you have imparted.love and hugs