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Essence of Betrayal

Betrayal, like the coldest wind that turns to ice in your veins That cannot be liquefied by apologetic words or obvious guilt It only seems to melt when we accept that people will always do what they want But shards always remain and the shock still lingers in the memory Because you never saw it coming But now you watch for it and although the ice has melted, the coldness reminds you to expect it...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 2/17/2014 6:56:00 PM
This spoke to me, I went through betrayal recently and it happened during the ice storm ironically, left me with no passion/romance, just ashes. Your write is beautifully written and speaks the truth. I want to extend my gratitude for you sharing this. This is a favorite of mine now ;) - Mike
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/17/2014 7:21:00 PM
I am both glad and sorry that you can relate to this poem! Its tough to let go of the betrayed feeling but it is worse to hold on, I hope you find your way to make it melt, thanks for your lovely comment! :)
Date: 2/14/2014 11:01:00 AM
I love your poem. It's really good. You never see someone stab you in the back but like everything else in life you live and you learn...
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/17/2014 7:19:00 PM
thanks Ayesha :) nd you are right!
Date: 2/12/2014 7:53:00 AM
"although the ice has melted, the coldness reminds you to expect it..." Nice figure of speech resonates in this piece.
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/12/2014 8:15:00 AM
Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem :)
Date: 2/12/2014 7:50:00 AM
After reading this, I have icicles forming all over my body: " the coldness reminds you to expect it..." —excellent imagery and shards of regret. Bravo, Poet!
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/12/2014 8:14:00 AM
Thank you very much for your feedback, it means a lot to me! And I am glad you enjoyed this poem

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