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Something sinister stalks the streets Searching the smells at sunset Slipping unseen, slinking in shadows Seeking that special sweet snack She sees with rose tinted glasses It's secretly stolen her senses Slowly the serpent approaches Since now it somehow seems safe It's sulphurous stench overcomes her She slumps at once on the stones It's sillibant stutter, stalling her speech Stealing her silent screams Sated at last it slides to the sewers Entrails slurping inside It slips it's tentacles into the slime And settles to sleep of it's feast Joint 3rd place in John Freeman's 'Most Awesome Paranormal Experience' contest

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Date: 3/10/2012 12:25:00 PM
This is fantastic, Nick. The alliteration makes the story more intense. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
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Date: 3/7/2012 9:20:00 PM
congrats Nick on an exciting win for this electrifying write luv.. most impressive lines of creative genius ..
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Date: 3/7/2012 10:57:00 AM
Good afternoon and congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "3rd place wins Only" contest Nick. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/7/2012 10:11:00 AM
NICK,,.Congratulations! THANK YOU FOR THE SUPPORTING ;-) my contest...much enjoyed your entry,~ always*PD
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Date: 3/15/2010 9:36:00 PM
Sounds like Alien! methinks it is not a true experience, but congrats on your cool win! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 2/28/2010 8:36:00 AM
Nick, thank your for supporting my contest with your poem. Congrtulations, Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/27/2010 5:49:00 PM
My congratulations on your win in the contest, Nick! Great job! Peace, Audrey
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Date: 2/27/2010 7:39:00 AM
Loved the reference to rose-tinted glasses stealing the woman's senses, Nick. Great poem! Congratulations on your success in John's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/27/2010 7:30:00 AM
Congrats Nick on your winning poem in Moses contest.. a wonderful write and well deserved win ..enjoy your special victory .. luv.. "Sweetheart" ..Linda-Marie..
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Date: 1/21/2010 5:55:00 AM
I love alliteration. And S is the perfect letter to choose for a serpent poem. The whole poem hisses. Nice read. Matt.
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Date: 1/20/2010 3:59:00 AM
This is kinda scary and I can't decide...Is it metaphoric? Is it just a horror write? Questions??? Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 1/20/2010 12:43:00 AM
Superb selection Nick.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments.
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Date: 1/19/2010 12:01:00 PM
This capture of the serpent stealing the senses is quite good Nick. Elaborate, elaborate. Smile. Sincerely, Moses
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Date: 1/19/2010 7:53:00 AM
This is an amazing write... I'm at a loss for words. =) -Echo
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Date: 1/19/2010 5:30:00 AM
Nick, The alliteration in this poem is amazing... It reads smoothly and you have definitely captured the essence of something sinister throughout the write... creepy/scary... in the night...Oooooo. Smiles, Dane Ann
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