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Entrapped Poetry

What would a hunter ever do with empty canvas, oils and brush? Maybe with ease he might entrap the finest hues of poetry: Catching moments in time and then painting them for eternity.

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Julia Ward

Date: 3/27/2015 2:18:00 PM

The key word is "entrap", also referring to what he does as a hunter, as well as the meaning of it in your second line. Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2015 2:32:00 PM

Thank you for delving deep into my words, Julia; you read my write well. Hugs // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 12/2/2014 3:00:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Paul. This really made me think of the possibilities.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2014 5:14:00 PM

Thank you Brenda. Endless possibilities are there for the taking; you yourself have painted many lovely poetic pictures. Keep your pen busy! // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/30/2014 4:54:00 PM

Ah-thought provoking! (upon the capture of bristle brush the hunter took his knife-he whittled out an arrow notch & placed an arrowhead-the paint he put upon his face to make his enemies dread) I like yours much better ;) Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2014 5:03:00 PM

Aww thank you Debbie; enjoyed your version of my sijo:) Hugs // paul

Joseph May

Date: 11/30/2014 11:30:00 AM

Very nice write Paul.. congrats on your win

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2014 5:02:00 PM

Thank you Joseph; you too merit congrats on your fine win. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/30/2014 10:55:00 AM

YOU painted an incredible image in my head with this write Paul - stunning! many congrats Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2014 5:01:00 PM

Thank you Jan; glad you enjoyed:) hugs // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 11/30/2014 7:33:00 AM

Wow Paul a unique n a superb write! Catching moments in time to paint for eternity is so well thought of! Congrats on win!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2014 4:59:00 PM

Glad you found this poem to your tastes, Upma. Thank you very much:) // paul

Skat A

Date: 11/30/2014 1:03:00 AM

PAUL,, Congratulations, thank you for the support. ~SKAT~

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2014 3:39:00 AM

Thank you Skat; it's always nice to be on your winners' list. Have a nice Sunday. /x/ paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/22/2014 11:48:00 AM

Sijos are difficult to pull off and this one rocked! So effortlessly done and creative. Did you know Bob Ross used to be in the army?? And now he's painting moments for eternity. Come to think of it this piece sorta reminds me of that bible verse that goes... he turned their swords into pruning hooks. Basically turned the warriors into gardeners... what a thought! Sorry my rambling comment...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/22/2014 11:59:00 AM

Thank you Timothy....it's great to have somebody commenting with insight; I don't mind the 'rambling'....I enjoy it! Glad you enjoyed my first ever sijo...love your comments, and the visit! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/8/2014 9:04:00 PM

I finally have seen the notes you left me here at your sijo poems (I don't often return and see such messages) but now that I see them, I have to tell you, I think both poems are awesome. The other one, more surprising!! This one more ethereal. I think both could do very well in that contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2014 2:43:00 AM

Love to read your balanced critique, Andrea:) thank you for 'awesome' comment...means a lot to me. cu // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/4/2014 9:05:00 PM

I read how you were not entering this one in a contest. IT would not make sense in Nette's temple contest. Did you mean for the contest to write about a poem? I sure think it would have been ideal for that contest because it describes so well the nature of what a poet does, but let me see if your other sijo is in the contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/5/2014 6:39:00 AM

Hi Andrea! Initially it was meant for Nette's Temple contest (was looking at poetry as a "temple of peace", as partly described by Jevgeny Yevtushenko who then goes on to say it's "savage war"); then I felt that she would have expected better...so a change of plans! txs for the welcome visit. /x/ paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/4/2014 3:26:00 AM

Was that muse me? HA HA! No, just kidding, but I WILL tell you that your other one is truer to form of a Sijo. From what I remember, each line of a Sijo, along with the syllable count has a part and counterpart to it. In other words, each line can be divided into two thoughts that are interrelated....sort of a yin and yang sort of thing. Wish you could read Debbie's blog on it. I forget the title, but she gives so much info on it. IF you read my poem, you will get some of the info fro that also.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/4/2014 5:10:00 AM

Especially not when it comes to words which I am passionate about. I did also notice that my poem on the same topic did no record breaking feat, while yours did. Apparently, your popularity exceeds mine! ;) That has not escaped me, either. Good job.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/4/2014 5:08:00 AM

No, there is not! ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 4:57:00 AM

There is not much that escapes your twinkling eyes....:)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/4/2014 4:10:00 AM

As in your UNSPOKEN poem, perhaps? ;) The one that shot to the very top?

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 3:48:00 AM

Thank you for putting my mind at rest. I understand what you are talking about, and that is one of the reasons that I made the change. Also, the other one came so straight from the heart....swooooooosh! (and yes, there have been times when you too accompanied my craving muse:)) // paul

Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/4/2014 3:26:00 AM

This is lovely, but the other is MORE a Sijo than this one is. That's my humble opinion.

Paul Callus

Date: 5/4/2014 2:49:00 AM

Sorry I have to disappoint you my friends,,,,but during the night my muse insisted that I do not enter this write for the contest...instead she gave me her own newer version. Still feel obliged to thank you from the bottom of my heart for falling in love with this one!!:) // Pls check out the latest and let me know what you think. // paul

Mel Merrill

Date: 5/4/2014 1:58:00 AM

Outstanding Paul. I didn't realize one could express so much--and so eloquently--in just three lines. A really beautiful write, my friend, and I wouldn't say so if I didn't mean it. Kudos. ~M

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 3:02:00 AM

Wow, Mel! Now this is what feedback is all about. Your comments make me grow wings! cu my friend. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 5/4/2014 1:52:00 AM

Loved this one, touched my soul ! Hues of poetry,, awesome Paul ! Reads a winner ! Gud luck in contest !

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 2:58:00 AM

Good day Dr. Upma! What lovely comments from a sincere heart! Pls read comments above...tell me later on if I have erred :) // paul

Mark Peterson

Date: 5/4/2014 1:12:00 AM

Lovely and serene...the source of great enjoyment for me this evening.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 2:56:00 AM

Thank you Mark; so very glad you enjoyed this one; always welcome to visit. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/4/2014 12:40:00 AM

"entrap the finest hues of poetry... " i read it thrice to fully feel each word.. :)you combine a hunter, poet, and a painter.. :D creative art.. :), olive eloisa here... :) God bless .. :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 5/4/2014 9:36:00 AM

from what i understand on the example somewhat two opposites themes... (winter, spring... then fold;capture) opposite... then the third.... :D??! don't know if how i see is right.. too :D not sure... olive eloisa with bulb lighted :D! lol

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 5/4/2014 9:27:00 AM

aha... check check my soupmail.. :D :P

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 2:54:00 AM

Thank you dearest Olive_eloi :) your comments hit the nail on the head......but pls read note above!!!!! I feel entrapped between two loves....a sijo love triangle!! :) // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/3/2014 9:25:00 PM

Wow. I had to read slow and absorbed this and it was beautiful and meaningful. good luck in the contest :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/4/2014 2:45:00 AM

Thank you Casarah! Your lovely comments are more than appreciated. // paul