Empty Apartment

No more icy showers,
No rats, no roaches,
I’ll never trek reluctantly,
Up your five flights again.

No more neighbors’ yelling,
No slumlords, no supers,
No longer will I freeze,
In your dark bitter space.

Though I’m cautious and weary,
Of the next empty apartment,
I’ll never look back,
Once I step out of your door.

No, no, don’t you worry,
There will always be another,
To suffer inside the hell,
Of your suffocating walls.

Where you will try to break them,
Confine and oppress them,
Until they are empty,
Just like you. Just like me.

*For Matt Caliri's "Empty Apartment" Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 2/1/2011 10:57:00 AM
Wow... is very powerful and well said. as always...thanks for checking out my work
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Date: 12/4/2010 7:26:00 AM
It's only natural how conditions like these force us to leave, Marilyn. I'd be out of there too! Good luck in Matt's contest.
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Date: 12/3/2010 10:54:00 PM
Wow Marilyn, what a brilliant write for the contest.. Good luck to you in Matt's contest ;-) Wilma
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Date: 12/3/2010 6:54:00 AM
Hey this is a superb poem. All thebest for this great entry.
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Date: 12/3/2010 5:36:00 AM
I hate to get out of this without giving a comment of my own but it's already been said in all the comments here! They all did a marvelous job of expressing what I wanted to say to you.....and I'll end by reiterating what Barbara said, Marilyn.
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Date: 11/24/2010 4:32:00 PM
Happy thanksgiving day, Marilyn
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Date: 11/20/2010 8:45:00 AM
Oh, a stinging and sad interpretation of the contest theme, Marilyn! Hope you aren't really feeling "empty" within during this holiday season. This entry is unique and reminds us how lucky we are not to live under such circumstances. Good luck in the contest. Best wishes for peace and joy over the holidays. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/20/2010 6:23:00 AM
What a wonderful theme you have chosen to write on Empty apartmant, Marilyn and good luck
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Date: 11/20/2010 5:04:00 AM
Wow, I love this one. When i was young ( just yesterday!) I had an aprtment like this one. If this isnt in the winners circle I will be surprised. BG
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Date: 11/20/2010 1:58:00 AM
this is a brilliant work of art. it give me a feeling of emptiness in my heart
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