Empty Apartment

The last box, packed and labeled
Had been put into the truck.
The keys were to be left on the counter
And the door locked behind us.

One last look around the empty apartment
To be sure nothing had been left behind.
I ran my hand over the mark on the wall
That her favourite painting had covered for years.

All the small holes had been puttied over
Covering the wall that had held so many memories.
All her pictures had been there.
The constant reminder of her family so loved.

If I closed my eyes I could see her
Standing by the window watching the birds.
One last deep breath,
The scent of lavender still hung in the air.....

I laid down the keys
And left for the last time.




for Matt Caliri's "Empty Apartment" contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 1/11/2011 9:59:00 PM
The only hole in the wall I had to fill with putty in my old place was the one in the kitchen where my brother lost his temper. I did not speak to him for over two years after that incident. Your work is very descriptive.
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Date: 11/19/2010 11:42:00 AM
Good luck in the contest.A beautiful write upon the sad space one can concede in' (Lin~Ra)
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Date: 11/19/2010 10:45:00 AM
A touching write for the contest... well done and good luck my dear...love Michael
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Date: 11/18/2010 3:37:00 PM
Good luck Francine with this wonderful entry .. a very vivid picture u painted in your description of the theme.. my entry is "Up in Smoke" more on the romantic breakup leaving an empty apartment.. behind like the romance..luv..
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Date: 11/18/2010 1:15:00 PM
You have penned quite sentimental and emotional thoughts on leaving the aprtment. Good luck. Francine
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Date: 11/18/2010 11:42:00 AM
Francine, As I try to empty the lump in my throat! This is just so beautiful, your mind is a loving image keeper full of such imagination and wonderful emotions. This is going into my favorites Good Luck in the contest... As Always, Shar
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Date: 11/18/2010 10:15:00 AM
Wonderful entry Francine, and so many people will have lived your words. Good luck in Matt's contest >> James :)
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Date: 11/18/2010 5:35:00 AM
This is a very moving interpretation of the contest theme, Francine. The theme can be taken many ways, but your poem touches the reader's heart. One day someone will be responsible for packing away our things -- the treasures of our lives. Beautifully written and I wish you success in the contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/18/2010 5:08:00 AM
A very beautiful picture you have painted with this write. You do feel sad when leaving a long lived place.
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