Emotional Stream

After the murder
his skin started to crawl,
it felt moist,
as he watched the body fall,
he felt the sweat prickle on his forehead,
while looking at the dead,
thinking,
blinking,
rapidly,
he then took a deep breath,
while standing over death,
he felt regrets,
as guilt was riddled on his face,
he’d get away,
because he left no trace,
but remorse would stay,
as he killed a man that day,
and the guilt ate at his heart,
and nothing could shake that apart,
it felt like bugs crawling up his leg,
his face frozen,
as he stood there,
mind filling with fear,
then he turned around and around
in slow manic circles,
then he fell down to the ground,
lost in an emotional stream,
and he wished it had all been a dream.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 4/23/2009 6:33:00 AM
Okay don't think Im weird but have you ever wondered what it feels like to really kill somebody? Watching it so much on tv that have no remorse I wonder about what it would really feel like. Deep right kid. Great job.
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Date: 4/22/2009 9:02:00 AM
A gripping account that one has to read to the end slowly to feel all the juices of horror. A good write.
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Date: 4/22/2009 6:58:00 AM
Your words are filled with so much emotion. A truly gripping write. Guilt and fear are so strong in this write that tears literally well up within me as I read. I can see the whole seen so clearly throughout. Great writing my friend, and thank you so much for your lovely comments. I am honored that you took time out to read my work. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 4/21/2009 10:34:00 PM
lost in an emotional stream,and he wished it all had been a dream-i see regret here and guilt for ending one's life-its good to feel guilt and regret when hurting others leading them to their end in any way-guilt leads to despair or to forgivness-i choose forgivness-i love "your emotional stream"Frank----charma
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Date: 4/21/2009 3:29:00 PM
Wow...power house of a poem, chilling. Well done! ~ Carrie
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Date: 4/21/2009 1:48:00 PM
geez Frank, well done, another one bites the dust, I just hope deservedly......Jim
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Date: 4/21/2009 10:30:00 AM
This is another write Frankie boyee that really tugs at my heart...
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Date: 4/21/2009 10:28:00 AM
Nice work, I loved the title...Raul
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