Embattled

They burst forth and charge downwards Matching uniforms shiny against the grey sky Their only desire to smash suicidally upon our ranks We hear the thunder of them coming, and carefully prepare The vanguard already lie smashed upon the ground The rest will soon swell the regiments of the defeated Moments before they arrive we deploy our umbrellas Countless warriors smash harmlessly inches above our heads Their watery remains dripping from our defences Mingling with those of their already fallen brethren Contest : FALL YOUR CHOICE any theme/any form max 12 lines Honorable Mention

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Dana Smith

Date: 1/10/2012 1:39:00 PM

I absolutely love this one, I personally think you deserved far mroe than an Honorable Mention!

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 11/16/2011 3:12:00 PM

This is a dang decent poem! I appreciate the feedback on "Demon Whispers". I rushed you through that one for a good reason. It is definitely a psychotic bout of paranoia and confusion. The tempo is somewhat spiraling backwards. I typed it as I spoke it aloud. This is one of the few poems I have typed this way. I will try to read as many poems from your archive as possible. I digg what I see so far!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/25/2011 3:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in Brian Strand's "Fall Your Choice" contest Nick. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/24/2011 12:31:00 AM

Interesting take on the contest. congratulations. Love, Joyce

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/23/2011 10:35:00 PM

Nick, I am so happy to see this poem recognized, as I already told you how much I liked it. Congratulations on your win. I am putting this poem in my favorites.

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/23/2011 10:14:00 PM

Creative write, Nick. Congrats on your Honorable Mention. Kim

Ralph Taylor

Date: 9/23/2011 7:37:00 PM

Congrats on your HM, Nick. Excellent write. Nice going. Ralph

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/23/2011 7:01:00 PM

great work!! love your imagination!!

Bob Quigley

Date: 9/23/2011 10:49:00 AM

Congratulations on your HM Nick

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/22/2011 7:47:00 AM

This is EXCELLENT Nick! I can see it in lights in the winners circle. I adore the rain and sleep to the sound of it every night because when it isn't raining I play my CD of rain and thunder and it lulls me to sleep.