Nick Bagnall Poet Narrative

Embattled

They burst forth and charge downwards
Matching uniforms shiny against the grey sky
Their only desire to smash suicidally upon our ranks
We hear the thunder of them coming, and carefully prepare
The vanguard already lie smashed upon the ground
The rest will soon swell the regiments of the defeated
Moments before they arrive we deploy our umbrellas
Countless warriors smash harmlessly inches above our heads
Their watery remains dripping from our defences
Mingling with those of their already fallen brethren







Contest : FALL YOUR CHOICE any theme/any form max 12 lines
Honorable Mention

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Dana Smith January 10, 2012 at 1:39 PM I absolutely love this one, I personally think you deserved far mroe than an Honorable Mention!

Jslambert Mister Roboto November 16, 2011 at 3:12 PM This is a dang decent poem! I appreciate the feedback on "Demon Whispers". I rushed you through that one for a good reason. It is definitely a psychotic bout of paranoia and confusion. The tempo is somewhat spiraling backwards. I typed it as I spoke it aloud. This is one of the few poems I have typed this way. I will try to read as many poems from your archive as possible. I digg what I see so far!

Carol Sunshine Brown September 25, 2011 at 3:41 PM Congratulations on your win in Brian Strand's "Fall Your Choice" contest Nick. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson September 24, 2011 at 12:31 AM Interesting take on the contest. congratulations. Love, Joyce

Connie Marcum Wong September 23, 2011 at 10:35 PM Nick, I am so happy to see this poem recognized, as I already told you how much I liked it. Congratulations on your win. I am putting this poem in my favorites.

Kim Merryman September 23, 2011 at 10:14 PM Creative write, Nick. Congrats on your Honorable Mention. Kim

Ralph Taylor September 23, 2011 at 7:37 PM Congrats on your HM, Nick. Excellent write. Nice going. Ralph

Doris Culverhouse September 23, 2011 at 7:01 PM great work!! love your imagination!!

Bob Quigley September 23, 2011 at 10:49 AM Congratulations on your HM Nick

Connie Marcum Wong September 22, 2011 at 7:47 AM This is EXCELLENT Nick! I can see it in lights in the winners circle. I adore the rain and sleep to the sound of it every night because when it isn't raining I play my CD of rain and thunder and it lulls me to sleep.

Jasonpoet Boyd September 22, 2011 at 7:01 AM A dismal description of the rain but a very good job of comparison. I like it.

Elizabeth Wesley September 21, 2011 at 6:09 PM Only your words exceed your imagination Nick, incredible verse on rain described as a battle. Love it! :)

Red Fiery September 20, 2011 at 2:07 PM sAME HERE IN CALCUTTA[ INDIA]. IT WAS NECESSARY AS HUMIDITY WAS KILLING EVERYONE...U PRESENTED SO BRILLIANTLY .

Tony Lane September 20, 2011 at 9:21 AM It's raining in Ohio too. Tony

John Smith September 20, 2011 at 9:01 AM Great! I imagine the flash of artillery and the ground soaked in 'blood.' Fun way to fight a war.

Kimberly Larocca September 20, 2011 at 8:30 AM You've painted a very vivid picture. Excellent!