Elevator, Elevator

Elevator, elevator
One of the most awkward places you can be
Standing, crowded much too close to me
Should you say hello or just keep to yourself?
So you stand there stiff resembling a doll on a shelf
Elevator, elevator
A sudden stench encompasses the whole box
People look around like they’ve caught the chicken pox
The air is thick with unease and irritability
Everyone’s in a rush, utilizing their capability
Elevator, elevator
After what seems to be millennia the box stops abruptly
Another stop, still standing waiting for the lobby
Irish man breaks the silence with a witty comment
Its just like the movies –elevator ineptness is his vent

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 1/15/2015 8:14:00 AM
You are not writing.Problems Aubrey?
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Date: 10/29/2014 3:32:00 AM
Taking up the feelings like an elevator.
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Date: 10/26/2014 9:20:00 PM
The Humor Is Great In This One- A Beautiful read Indeed. Check My Work Out Too - Thank You.
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Date: 10/26/2014 7:16:00 PM
Very authentic and love the humour you described in this read. Well done my friend! Congrats on being featured here this week!
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Date: 9/27/2014 6:18:00 PM
oh I love the humour in this write - its very difficult being confined in a small space not knowing whether to speak and there can be nothing worse than someone farting in a lift lol Hugs jan xx
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