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Winter winds whisper in the weeping willow tree Its naked branches shiver silently all around me Bitter biting winds howl around stinging my face I’m out on the moors; it’s such a desolate place I yearn for spring where dainty daffodils dance on zephyr breeze, it’s such a sweet romance Sultry summer skies bring warm winds to enthrall Beautiful blossoms pirouette perfectly as they fall Autumn brings blustery gales swirling all around Rich russet leaves tumble, carpeting the ground Terrifying tornadoes wreak havoc across some lands In wake of its destruction not a building still stands Cooling summer breezes or a blustery gale is blowing We can’t see wind but its effect in the trees is showing 2nd place in Elements Part 2 Wind. Sponsored by Brian Davey judged 3/29/16 Submitted to second place contest sponsored by Laura Loo 03~19~16

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Moon Flower

Date: 6/28/2016 11:01:00 AM

Simply beautiful. Congrats on your awesome win, Jan. ;)

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/27/2016 3:19:00 PM

Jan, congrats again on another win for this lovely poem. Hugs, Sandra

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/27/2016 10:47:00 AM

Congrats on your win my lovely friend. A beautiful 7. Loved always, bl

Lu Loo

Date: 6/27/2016 10:15:00 AM

Jan, I love the alliteration! This is so well penned lady...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Paul Callus

Date: 3/31/2016 3:36:00 AM

This is very lovely, Jan. I am glad you did not go overboard with alliteration; it would not have sounded as good! Congratulations on a merited podium finish! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 5:16:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Paul - when I saw other entries I was worried I hadn't used enough alliteration but I was trying to focus on my imagery and was really pleased with the result:-) hugs jan xx

Balveen Cheema

Date: 3/31/2016 2:23:00 AM

A lyrical flow in all seasons! Congrats Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 2:27:00 AM

Many thanks Balveen:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 3/30/2016 8:22:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your ELEMENTS WIND win :) Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 2:06:00 AM

Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/30/2016 6:05:00 PM

Back again with a big congrats, Jan! You and I are sharing a spot on the podium it seems ... I used my alliteration rather randomly as well, so it doesn't seem to have been too big of a deal (just as long as the content was good!) ...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 2:27:00 AM

I can also write a serious wind poem too lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 6:09:00 PM

When I saw other entries using a lot of alliteration I wondered if my poem was going to place at all, so I focused on the imagery and I think that helped get such a good spot:-) hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 3/30/2016 1:28:00 PM

Great Congrats Jan to win on the awesome piece. Hugs. Anisha D

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 2:05:00 PM

thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Mcclain

Date: 3/30/2016 1:28:00 PM

Hi Jan, As predicted "You should breeze to a win with this one!" Congrats! Cheers, Brian

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 2:05:00 PM

LOL thanks for the great comment Brian:-) hugs jan xx

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 3/30/2016 12:22:00 PM

Congrats Jan, for your top placement in the contest with this beautiful poem!!! ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 2:04:00 PM

Many thanks Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/30/2016 6:50:00 AM

Way to go Jan, great win...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 7:01:00 AM

Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/30/2016 12:58:00 AM

Wonderful poetry n win Jan.. big congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 4:32:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 3/29/2016 9:36:00 PM

Great reading here, a variety of types of wind both pleasant and not so pleasant. Congratulations, Jan, on your placement.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 9:40:00 PM

thanks so much reason:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 3/29/2016 8:53:00 PM

Very nice Jan...I got caught up in the breeze...whoosh

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 8:54:00 PM

hope it was a zephyr one Tim:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/29/2016 8:51:00 PM

I feel silly how did I miss this? This poem is spectacular Jan, but I need not tell you, the win does! Hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 8:53:00 PM

aww thanks Arthur - and for once its not a poem about farting lol:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/29/2016 2:02:00 PM

I thought this would be a top winner Jan and I am so happy to see it is. Big Congratulations my friend! #7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 2:03:00 PM

Many thanks Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/29/2016 12:38:00 PM

Lots of wonderful imagery and nice alliteration, Jan. Congratulations on your nice placement! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 12:39:00 PM

Thanks so much Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 3/29/2016 9:41:00 AM

congrats comrade commanding win

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 9:50:00 AM

Many thanks Dave I was delighted to place so well in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey

Date: 3/29/2016 4:00:00 AM

Congrats on your win in the elements wind contest Jan! Beautiful blossoms silhouette perfect as they fall is such an amazing line that gives off so much imagery with it! Great Job!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2016 4:32:00 AM

Thanks Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 3/23/2016 6:36:00 AM

Wonderful alliteration Jan, in a lovely poem. The first couplet is killer!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2016 6:44:00 AM

Thanks James I love the first couplet to - in this poem have used a words or phrases from other poems I have written :-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 3/21/2016 2:59:00 PM

Jan, this is WONDERFUL with just the right touch of alliteration, I am loving this 7 ~

Jan Allison
Date: 3/21/2016 3:10:00 PM

I hope Brian likes it too:-) hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 3/21/2016 12:55:00 PM

Beautifully pictured the elements wind. Good luck in the contest my lovely friend, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 3/21/2016 3:10:00 PM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/20/2016 11:07:00 PM

Excellent use of language, Jan. You took me to all the places the wind shows her face. I hope Brian likes it :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/21/2016 3:09:00 PM

Thanks Timothy I hope I have enough alliteration as I have seen poems mainly consisting of it but i just have to go with my unique take and hope for the best:-) hugs Jan xx

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 3/20/2016 1:53:00 PM

Brilliant couplets with fine rhythm, rhymes, imagery and awesome alliterations! EXCELLENT Jan!! Keith

Jan Allison
Date: 3/20/2016 1:56:00 PM

Thanks again for your support Keith:-) hugs jan xx