Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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Elements Wind

Winter winds whisper in the weeping willow tree
Its naked branches shiver silently all around me

Bitter biting winds howl around stinging my face
I’m out on the moors; it’s such a desolate place

I yearn for spring where dainty daffodils dance
on zephyr breeze, it’s such a sweet romance

Sultry summer skies bring warm winds to enthrall
Beautiful blossoms pirouette perfectly as they fall

Autumn brings blustery gales swirling all around
Rich russet leaves tumble, carpeting the ground

Terrifying tornadoes wreak havoc across some lands
In wake of its destruction not a building still stands

Cooling summer breezes or a blustery gale is blowing
We can’t see wind but its effect in the trees is showing

2nd place in Elements Part 2 Wind. Sponsored by Brian Davey judged 3/29/16
Submitted to second place contest sponsored by Laura Loo
03~19~16

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Moon Flower June 28, 2016 at 11:01 AM Simply beautiful. Congrats on your awesome win, Jan. ;)

Sandra Haight June 27, 2016 at 3:19 PM Jan, congrats again on another win for this lovely poem. Hugs, Sandra

Bl Devnath June 27, 2016 at 10:47 AM Congrats on your win my lovely friend. A beautiful 7. Loved always, bl

Beautiful Scars June 27, 2016 at 10:15 AM Jan, I love the alliteration! This is so well penned lady...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Paul Callus March 31, 2016 at 3:36 AM This is very lovely, Jan. I am glad you did not go overboard with alliteration; it would not have sounded as good! Congratulations on a merited podium finish! hugs // paul Jan Allison March 31, 2016 at 5:16 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Paul - when I saw other entries I was worried I hadn't used enough alliteration but I was trying to focus on my imagery and was really pleased with the result:-) hugs jan xx

Balveen Cheema March 31, 2016 at 2:23 AM A lyrical flow in all seasons! Congrats Jan! Jan Allison March 31, 2016 at 2:27 AM Many thanks Balveen:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper March 30, 2016 at 8:22 PM Jan, congratulations on your ELEMENTS WIND win :) Hugs Eve Jan Allison March 31, 2016 at 2:06 AM Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks March 30, 2016 at 6:05 PM Back again with a big congrats, Jan! You and I are sharing a spot on the podium it seems ... I used my alliteration rather randomly as well, so it doesn't seem to have been too big of a deal (just as long as the content was good!) ... Jan Allison March 31, 2016 at 2:27 AM I can also write a serious wind poem too lol:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison March 30, 2016 at 6:09 PM When I saw other entries using a lot of alliteration I wondered if my poem was going to place at all, so I focused on the imagery and I think that helped get such a good spot:-) hugs jan xx

Brian Mcclain March 30, 2016 at 1:28 PM Hi Jan, As predicted "You should breeze to a win with this one!" Congrats! Cheers, Brian Jan Allison March 30, 2016 at 2:05 PM LOL thanks for the great comment Brian:-) hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta March 30, 2016 at 1:28 PM Great Congrats Jan to win on the awesome piece. Hugs. Anisha D Jan Allison March 30, 2016 at 2:05 PM thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Teddy Kimathi March 30, 2016 at 12:22 PM Congrats Jan, for your top placement in the contest with this beautiful poem!!! ;-) Jan Allison March 30, 2016 at 2:04 PM Many thanks Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith March 30, 2016 at 6:50 AM Way to go Jan, great win... Jan Allison March 30, 2016 at 7:01 AM Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 30, 2016 at 12:58 AM Wonderful poetry n win Jan.. big congrats! Jan Allison March 30, 2016 at 4:32 AM Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet March 29, 2016 at 9:36 PM Great reading here, a variety of types of wind both pleasant and not so pleasant. Congratulations, Jan, on your placement. Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 9:40 PM thanks so much reason:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith March 29, 2016 at 8:53 PM Very nice Jan...I got caught up in the breeze...whoosh Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 8:54 PM hope it was a zephyr one Tim:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso March 29, 2016 at 8:51 PM I feel silly how did I miss this? This poem is spectacular Jan, but I need not tell you, the win does! Hugs! Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 8:53 PM aww thanks Arthur - and for once its not a poem about farting lol:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong March 29, 2016 at 2:02 PM I thought this would be a top winner Jan and I am so happy to see it is. Big Congratulations my friend! #7 ; ) Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 2:03 PM Many thanks Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight March 29, 2016 at 12:38 PM Lots of wonderful imagery and nice alliteration, Jan. Congratulations on your nice placement! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 12:39 PM Thanks so much Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

D.W. Rodgers March 29, 2016 at 9:41 AM congrats comrade commanding win Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 9:50 AM Many thanks Dave I was delighted to place so well in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey March 29, 2016 at 4:00 AM Congrats on your win in the elements wind contest Jan! Beautiful blossoms silhouette perfect as they fall is such an amazing line that gives off so much imagery with it! Great Job! Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 4:32 AM Thanks Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman March 23, 2016 at 6:36 AM Wonderful alliteration Jan, in a lovely poem. The first couplet is killer! Jan Allison March 23, 2016 at 6:44 AM Thanks James I love the first couplet to - in this poem have used a words or phrases from other poems I have written :-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France March 21, 2016 at 2:59 PM Jan, this is WONDERFUL with just the right touch of alliteration, I am loving this 7 ~ Jan Allison March 21, 2016 at 3:10 PM I hope Brian likes it too:-) hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath March 21, 2016 at 12:55 PM Beautifully pictured the elements wind. Good luck in the contest my lovely friend, bl Jan Allison March 21, 2016 at 3:10 PM Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks March 20, 2016 at 11:07 PM Excellent use of language, Jan. You took me to all the places the wind shows her face. I hope Brian likes it :) Jan Allison March 21, 2016 at 3:09 PM Thanks Timothy I hope I have enough alliteration as I have seen poems mainly consisting of it but i just have to go with my unique take and hope for the best:-) hugs Jan xx

Keith Bickerstaffe March 20, 2016 at 1:53 PM Brilliant couplets with fine rhythm, rhymes, imagery and awesome alliterations! EXCELLENT Jan!! Keith Jan Allison March 20, 2016 at 1:56 PM Thanks again for your support Keith:-) hugs jan xx

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