Elements Part 4 - Fire

Stars In My Heart

Free from pain, he lay aloof and still on the bier
I saw him sleep motionless with no trace of fear
Recanting the prayers after the village priest-head
Eyes lowered I sniffled and dropped my heavy head

Sandalwood logs and incense were placed above him
Saline tears kept dripping down as all looked so grim
The crackling red flames shot arrows to heaven's bed 
When pyre was kindled to bid farewell to the dead

His soul with fire danced in celebration 
But our souls were charred and ashen as dad moved on
In a pensive mood I reflected on fusion
Of bonds and connections that bind us to love on

The inferno brought me out of this delusion
Of nothingness, but stars in my heart to live on


May 1, 2016
Elements Parts 4 - Fire
For Brian Davey

12 syllables in each line

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 5/9/2016 6:46:00 PM
Beautiful flow to your write, and wonderful imagery.
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Date: 5/4/2016 5:14:00 PM
Enjoyed the visual of sandalwood logs and incense. Congratulations!
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/5/2016 1:09:00 PM
Thanks Kim!
Date: 5/4/2016 11:48:00 AM
Very well written poem, Balveen - exactly as it happened at my dad's funeral. Congrats on your win. ~karam~
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:22:00 PM
Thanks Karam!
Date: 5/4/2016 9:49:00 AM
Congratulation on your win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:28:00 PM
Thanks Devnath!
Date: 5/4/2016 4:03:00 AM
I just loved the theme you wrote this in Balveen! A ode to the rites of passage in paganism, great job and congratulations
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:25:00 PM
Thanks Brian for your appreciation!
Date: 5/2/2016 8:19:00 AM
YOU SHOULD BE PROUD OF THIS SONNET. It is certainly a very fine sonnet, that was a pleasure for me to read this beautiful morn. Solid 7 and good luck in that contest..
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:27:00 PM
How kind, Robert! Thanks!
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