Element Water

It took place shortly after   and the stage was set
before words      before ink      before heavenly breath
There was a rain on the parade
of eternal monotony
and the angels were elated

In the Beginning God created...      the verse everyone knows
tantalizing phrasing that leaves you on your tip-toes

before grass      before plants      before earthly foes

And the earth was without form...      (and talk about void!)

It was there when it was all lightning and storm:
chaos untamed in watery upheaval,
though the celestial walls were impermeable

Enough disarray to make a grown man weep

And darkness was over the surface of the deep...

It was there before it was given the title: Sea
Before light was birthed with a "Let there be"

Blanketing the earth with cerulean comfort
in preparation for ethereal tickles,
despair happy to take her wings

And the Spirit of God was hovering...

Like a golden eagle dipping down
into azure pools
knowing mountains will soon rise from your depths

... but LOVE is the requisite
   ... and HOPE is the heart of it

Just like the weather that's about to hit the scene,
before Pangaea performs in emerald green

... and there was morning      the Second Day

Can you not hear your doubts just wash away?

---remember what happened on the Third?
I'm sure you do---

As you see Him reaching down with liquid love for you,
longing to invigorate your being

He wants to split you in half
as the Rod of Moshe
made watery walls of crystallization
He longs to enter into your towering trust

(and not just on occasion)

For sometimes the Water of Life is dramatic
Sometimes it's not

And sometimes your fears could use a little irrigation
(right now your eyes could use
a bit of prayerful precipitation)

Remember the ruby water that dripped down
the Face of the Son
that fateful day
Drink it in      Become full
Indulge in humble hydration

Your heart will tell you what you should

And behold it was very good...



NOTE: Moshe is the Hebrew rendering of the name Moses.

Written April 2nd, 2016
For the Element Water Contest Hosted by Brian Davey

Six Words Used: Impermeable, Requisite, Invigorate, Crystallization, Precipitation, Hydration
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Makama Avatar
May 9, 2016 at 12:54 PM
Absolutely brilliant and beautiful. A great 7 for me friend.
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 1:16 PM
Thanks Funom!
Inman Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:34 PM
Excellent write Timothy. A very intelligent and well thought out write.
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 1:11 PM
Thank you very much James!
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April 27, 2016 at 11:56 PM
Awesome Timothy, Congrats on your win. XOX ~LINDA~
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 12:58 PM
Thanks PD!
Dietrich Avatar
April 18, 2016 at 3:18 PM
A very well deserved win, Timothy. I remember this is one i LOVED. Congrats on your win.
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 12:47 PM
Thanks Andrea!
Dutta Avatar
April 18, 2016 at 12:02 PM
Congrats Timothy to win on wonderful water. Anisha D
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 12:19 PM
Thanks Anisha!
A. Sharma Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 10:18 PM
Congrats on superb win with this exquisite write Timothy..
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 12:16 PM
Thanks Upma!
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 8:11 PM
Oh Timothy, I am so happy to see this a top winner. I loved it as you know. Congratulations on this wonderful deserving win my friend! #7 :)
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 12:13 PM
Thank you very much Connie! :)
Haight Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 3:11 PM
I love how you wrote this, Timothy, in such a spiritual and mystical way. Congratulations on your fine win in the Element of Water contest! Sandra
Hicks Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 11:52 AM
Thank you Sandra for your insightful feedback! :)
Scars Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 11:30 AM
Timothy, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
Hicks Avatar
May 10, 2016 at 8:58 PM
Thanks Laura!
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April 17, 2016 at 7:56 AM
Congrats on your beautiful win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
Hicks Avatar
May 10, 2016 at 8:45 PM
Thanks Barja!
Davey Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 6:21 AM
Congratulations Timothy another great write in this elements series! Can't wait to read your final entry on fire, I'm sure your poem will heat things up!
Hicks Avatar
May 10, 2016 at 8:42 PM
Thank you very much for my placement, Brian, I had a lot of fun! Not sure if your Fire contest is still going on or not (I probably missed it) ... :( Life gets in the way of Soup, at times ...
Dietrich Avatar
April 10, 2016 at 8:37 PM
seeing another response you gave me to a comment I made. You gotta know, I only see those things when I can't find a poem of yours to read new. Then I end up reviewing older posts to see if I missed anything of yours. I gotta rush tonight so I can't think of where else to look . I wonder if I have seen all your poems!!!
Hamilton Avatar
April 8, 2016 at 9:41 AM
Prayerful precipitation,wow! humble hydration just great phraseology. Moshe you really like hebrew eh!
Hicks Avatar
May 10, 2016 at 8:26 PM
I suppose so, my friend ... I'm a bit eccentric at times. Thanks for the read and the nice feedback :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 5:06 PM
Wow Timothy this poem is stunningly beautiful!! A spiritual parting of the clouds...and let there be rain, the life giving source of all life! I loved this entry that is certain to end up on top of the winner's list! Bravo my friend! #7++ ; )
Hicks Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 2:16 AM
Thanks so much Connie! I find the first chapter of Genesis to be especially poetic in its language and meaning, and so I had a lot of fun incorporating and elaborating many of the verses into this poem.
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April 5, 2016 at 10:50 AM
This just might be your finest hour, to date. A Flood of Brilliance. (You could make a living off of this kind of writing you know)... J.
Hicks Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 2:14 AM
I'm not sure what to say, but that sure is an uplifting comment, James! I haven't had the greatest luck trying to publish my longer poems (but have had some success with my smaller ones as well as one short story) ... So happy you enjoyed :D
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April 3, 2016 at 5:27 PM
I can't tell you how much I love this! The structure, the content the personality, all uniquely you!! Beautiful piece - inspiring and delightful to read. "Before light was birthed with a "Let there be" ~ nice line! Humble hydration... I like that! Very nicely done, Timothy. Adding to my favorites my friend! Needless to say this is a winner. Always, Laura
Hicks Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 12:59 AM
Thank you very much Laura! There is a lot of poetry in Genesis, and it got my mind going :)
Callus Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 1:39 PM
Has anyone told you (again) that you're on a roll?! Richard says that you met this challenge with style...not just any style, but your own special style that is hard to imitate! Yes, I believe that many of us could use a little irrigation...even one like me who was born an Aquarian:) #7++ // paul [ps~Andrea will not have to eat her hat!]
Hicks Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 12:17 AM
I should hope so (eating hats aren't good on your teeth or your stomach!) ... you honor me yet again, Paul. I'm not sure why the words come to me in this fashion, but I'm always thankful for the chance to be inspired. I was born a Leo myself.
Dietrich Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 12:15 PM
You are so amazing. ANOTHER poem I have to fave. Good heavens!! Talk about STYLE. Richard is right on that. If this does not win, I will have to eat my hat.
Hicks Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 12:08 AM
I run out of things to say, Andrea ... THANK you yet again. I suppose I'm on a creative streak, but many of these lines were direct quotes from Genesis 1 ... it was about elaborating and intertwining my own thoughts with it.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 9:28 AM
You met this challenge with style!!
Hicks Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 11:45 PM
Thanks Richard! :)
Smith Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 8:27 AM
Another brilliant piece by you young man. I loved it...going to fav it so I can come back and enjoy it again
Hicks Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 7:30 PM
Thank you very much Tim. I'm glad you liked it! I enjoyed integrating some of the early verses from Genesis, as I find there's a lot of beautiful poetry in that book.
Allison Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 8:24 AM
WOW I love your take on the theme Timothy - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Hicks Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 6:50 PM
Thank you Jan!
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 4:37 AM
This is too good Timothy! I predict this will be at the topx I loved it! #7++
Hicks Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 2:49 PM
Thanks Connie! Much appreciated :)
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