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Eight Words

Contest: Eight Words Sponsor: Emile Pinet 6-16-23 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Eight Words WISTFUL FEELINGS, An expression of MELANCHOLY DEPRESSION, Wake in winsome gloom of a GLOOMY sheath Cluttered with roving remnants Of GRIM recollections That SHROUD an anguished woundedness In WITHDRAWN silence To bind my sores with loneliness, With isolation’s balm, Untouchable. My world gone topsy-turvy Turns to the melody of living sonatas In chiming morningtide psalms And eventide’s bell songs To leave behind the bondage Of this shattered shell, This tattered cocoon of silken sutures. Beyond the pensive dreamscape This realm of gloom fades, Screeches back into midnight’s stronghold, Forgotten in azure morning shadows, When resplendent neon pinions Unfold kaleidoscopic Into giddy, gliding joy.

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/24/2023 4:51:00 AM

Good Morning Sam. Hello. This is more than a contest entry. It stands on its own. Yes, you wrote with dignity grace and wisdom for all who endure such a life and condition. Truly. It was a pleasure turning to your entry this morning. Enjoy the weekend. Take Care and blessings to all. (smile)

Sam Kauffman
Date: 6/27/2023 10:15:00 AM

Hi Lisa! I am so thankful for your beautiful feedback and so glad this poem spoke to the often crippling condition of depression - something all of us have experienced on various levels at one time or another! Thank you for your words that inspire and motivate! All the best! Blessings!!

Jim Slaughter

Date: 6/23/2023 10:35:00 AM

Wow, Sam! I think you've used those "eight words" to maximum advantage. BOL in the contest.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 6/23/2023 11:59:00 AM

Greetings Jim! Thank you! These words just seemed to fall into place for me like finding that lost piece of a jigsaw puzzle! So grateful for your positive feedback. Blessings!

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 6/20/2023 5:54:00 AM

Hi Sam, This is an amazing poem here. I loved so much of how you took the reader to the depths of despair, "the tattered cocoon of silken sutures" such wonderful imagery. Good luck and God bless you and your writing.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 6/20/2023 10:37:00 AM

Hi Nancy, I am so grateful for your lovely message! Thank you. These prompt words really took me on a journey into that dark place called despair where hopelessness lives. But, they also took me into a place where healing and new life happens - a place of healing sleep and metamorphosis. This turned out to be a joyful journey in the end. Sending you blessings of grace and peace..

M. L. Kiser

Date: 6/18/2023 11:45:00 AM

This is rather beautiful, wonderful messaging here, excellent depth too. Very nicely done.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 6/20/2023 10:32:00 AM

Hi ML! Thank you so much for your gracious feedback. So grateful for your positive words and lovely compliments. I have to admit that with these prompt words, the poem almost wrote itself. Love it when that happens. Hope you are well! Many thanks and blessings to you.

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/16/2023 5:00:00 PM

Your poem showcases exceptional aesthetic appeal through the use of vivid imagery. Your creativity in crafting a piece for such a challenging form in the contest is commendable, Sam. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, my dear friend.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 6/20/2023 10:26:00 AM

Dear Lasaad! I am so deeply touched by your feedback to this poem. Somehow these eight words seemed to be like a puzzle pieces that fit together to form the warp and woof of this poem. I couldn't help but think of a cocoon and the butterfly inside waiting for new birth. This image kept floating through my mind. As always, so grateful for your thoughtful message! You always take time plumb the heart of a poem. Blessings dear friend!

Bill Baker

Date: 6/16/2023 2:04:00 PM

Very creative in your poem for this difficult form for the contest, Sam. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bill

Sam Kauffman
Date: 6/20/2023 10:18:00 AM

Hi Bill! Thank you so much! I really enjoy writing to "prompt" words. Like a good kick in the inspiration! So happy you enjoyed this endeavor to catch the spirit of the words. Blessings my friend!