Richard Lamoureux Poet Alliteration

Eddy

I try to see 
back before 
to who Eddy once was
just barely before when
the bending began
Eddy was after all
a cute child 
wide eyed
hugging kissing and kind

Somehow horrible happened
It tricked and trapped his mind
Loud shouting screaming sounds
parents preaching pain
through domestic degradation 
careless communication
fraught with frustration
Pass the potatoes please
then spilled milk smacking sensation
belt welts broken eggs no bacon
Get up go clean up
never ever interrupt 
battles brief and abrupt
ranting and raving
mom misbehaving
Eddy helpless and in need of saving
experiencing what no child should be braving
Learning man lessons 
before he started shaving

He can't  depend on dear dad
who pretends perfection
in his ship shape barber shop
where his jolly joking rarely stops
Important friends doctors and cops
humorous happy back slaps
Eddy feels hidden looks and subtle attacks

Shoe shine simple
comic book quick
When the shop closes
Tearful Eddy gets another licking
At two times five even Eddy starts kicking
his hurt turns into fists swinging
runaway day trip escaping
Then away he starts staying
getting into trouble time
not enough praying
rules that need breaking
Who he'll become
there's little mistaking 
what he wants he happily starts taking

He can't shake the mistakes
Travels life fast with worn brakes
Tears turn into lakes
He has and has caused 
many heart breaks
Sometimes past prisons
Are to hard to escape
I think of my daddy 
dear Eddy 
and my soul shakes
Sometimes  time ticks
Other times it just takes!

Inspired by a comment made by John Hamilton after he read my 
poem "between the words of my father".


My Entry for S. Grace's  "Mental Illness Contest."

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Alexis Y. March 22, 2021 at 7:44 AM WoW! Richard, What a well-written poem and difficult to read. I am because I read “ Special Taste” In most cases, “ folk” repeat the cycle of abuse. The compassion and understanding you have for your father are evident in your write. You came out on the other side of a cycle of abuse. Writes like this are so powerful and life-changing because they can help others in a profound way-Alexis Richard Lamoureux March 22, 2021 at 8:06 AM Comments like this make writing worthwhile. Hugs Rick. Thanks for looking up my poem.

Brian Strand September 8, 2020 at 9:01 AM Yes Richard,we are all influenced by 'who' we are and how we are nutured.Father son is the key to our gender,so thankful I found my spiritual father aged 48,and learned to cry and became able to hug my Dad what was to be the final time I saw him, at my youngest daughters wedding.Stay creative(worthy of Podium place if it was in a contest of mine) Richard Lamoureux September 8, 2020 at 12:49 PM Thanks Brian, I appreciate you looking it up.

William Darnell Sr May 19, 2020 at 5:06 PM Hi Richard, good evening! Wow, deeply written piece here. The anguish of what he went through here. Gods Blessing to you in the most out pouring way, my friend. It stirred emotions in me, I didn't think could be stirred only by myself. Thank you Richard truly, for leading me here. It was ordained, that's for sure. I'm sure you'll become an asset in my life, Richard. Take care for now... Best of Wishes, William Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2020 at 5:22 PM Your response makes having written the piece worth while. Thanks for checking it out.

Judy Ball March 4, 2017 at 5:37 AM What a deeply moving piece this is. It really breaks your heart to know that there are children out there braving these things. A parent can either make or break a child and in so doing they either build or destroy an adult. A great poem with an important message. From 1 to 7 this is a 10 in my book. God Bless, JB Richard Lamoureux March 4, 2017 at 6:48 AM Wow Judy, thanks. I also appreciate the blessing. If not for God's kindness I would not have been able to have empathy and see things from my dad's perspective.

Becca Teagan March 3, 2017 at 9:59 PM Rick :( This is such a good poem, so full of emotion.. so well written... so sad :( well done, friend. Richard Lamoureux March 4, 2017 at 6:52 AM Hi Becca, it is so good to connect with you. How have you been? Time of late has been so limited that I haven't had much time here. Thanks for your thoughtful response to this piece. I'm glad I was able to express my thoughts in a relatable way. I wasn't sure how effective a vehicle this form would be.

Emile Pinet March 1, 2017 at 12:09 PM Powerful emotions are not blatantly flaunted within your words, but are secreted just under the surface, leaving an emptiness that grabs the reader's heart and threatens to break it with the weight of reality. Emile. Richard Lamoureux March 4, 2017 at 6:54 AM If I could favorite a comment Emile this would most certainly qualify. Thanks my friend.

Keith O.J. Hunt February 27, 2017 at 7:54 AM Incredible write Richard, so many sad songs out there; my family fortunately for me was good, some of my friends went through what Eddy did, brutal. They are forever changed. A very moving heartfelt poem Richard. All the best Richard Lamoureux February 27, 2017 at 7:56 AM Thanks Keith, I'm glad yours is a happier story.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 27, 2017 at 12:28 AM This is so tragic and heartbreaking but written with beautiful compassion...it's so sad how history repeats itself too often. How wonderful that with God's love, you were able to break the cycle. Thank you for sharing your father's story, and thank you so much for your kind comments today. I'm honored to be amongst your followed poets! Hugs, Rhonda Richard Lamoureux February 27, 2017 at 7:54 AM To be honest I was surprised I hadn't already had you in my favourite poets. You do have talent and I have enjoyed reading your poems. Unfortunately time doesn't allow me to read as many as I would like.

Connie Marcum Wong February 25, 2017 at 6:55 PM A broken spirit leads to a vengeance that can only be tempered by unconditional love. I can relate. Wonderfully expressed Richrd! 7 ; ) Richard Lamoureux February 26, 2017 at 8:59 AM If not for the unconditional Love of my Heavenly Father I would have probably experienced a similar fate. Thanks for your warm visit.

Kim Rodrigues February 25, 2017 at 4:45 PM Richard you so aptly describe the awful breaking of a boy's soul! Richard Lamoureux February 26, 2017 at 9:00 AM Thanks Kim.

Freddie Robinson Jr. February 25, 2017 at 6:41 AM Very profound poem, Richard. It was heart-wrenching and adventurous oddly at the same time. Those trails and tribulations of your father's turbulent youth, unknowing to him, had prepared him well to deal w/the hardness of this world. If only he had the right voice of wisdom to help guide him, to help him make the right choices in life. Your father's toughness would've made him a great mighty man for Christ. Magnificent poem. A 7 all night long. Love has no limit. Love always. Richard Lamoureux February 25, 2017 at 7:37 AM I had always hoped that would be his path. Thanks for such a thoughtful and compassionate response.

Duke Beaufort February 25, 2017 at 6:10 AM The compassion/understanding you have for your father in this piece is remarkable. My dad was in some ways similar to yours. The circumstances were quite different. He was a bit more self made, and I find it hard to understand why he was so distant. Some people are not destined to have children and should know better. It's ironic because then we would not be having this interaction. Richard Lamoureux March 1, 2017 at 8:55 AM You are kind Duke as is demonstated through your empathy. Blessings to you my friend. Duke Beaufort February 26, 2017 at 9:52 AM How lucky for us that you did! When an individual is able to escape from something like that and change the dynamics of life, it is a miraculous thing. It means you are a very, very special person. Richard Lamoureux February 25, 2017 at 7:45 AM I'm sorry to hear of the similarity Duke. My dad was very needy and required constant adoration and attention. We were the surrogates for the love he didn't receive as a child. Unfortunately a combination of alcohol and drugs mixed with bipolar disorder and narcissism made him a complex person to live with. But for the grace of God I escaped.

Eve Roper February 24, 2017 at 10:11 AM Very well done, :) and moving Hugs Eve Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2017 at 4:47 PM Thanks Eve.

Demetrios Trifiatis February 24, 2017 at 9:22 AM What a fabulous writing full of wisdom and grace! Absolutely admirable, my friend, Richard! Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2017 at 4:47 PM Thanks Demetrios.;0)

Darren White February 24, 2017 at 3:06 AM It made me tremble, but it's written down so well, I can only admire..... Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2017 at 8:47 AM Thanks Darren. ;0)

Andrea Dietrich February 23, 2017 at 8:49 PM A sad sad story, Richard and it happens all too often. You wrote it well and held my attention. SEVEN (thanks so much for that awesome sexyku contest. I saw the winners and it was great fun to reach them all) Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2017 at 8:48 AM A well deserved win Andrea. Thanks for visiting.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 23, 2017 at 2:04 PM - Eddy's story could have been anyone, a fate many experience - A deeply moving poem, Richard - # 7 - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2017 at 8:49 AM Thanks Anne Lise.

Scott Thirtyseven February 23, 2017 at 7:07 AM An all to true story. The lives of too many. Nicely weighted, nicely penned. A fav, to be tweeted. Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2017 at 7:22 AM Thanks Scott.

Deborah Burch February 22, 2017 at 10:58 PM Fabulous!! Richard!! I can't express sufficiently how wonderful I think your poem is...Life in times past...how marvelous you put it all together...times when being a child was so very hard...bravo!! Big Hugggs deb Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2017 at 9:27 AM Thanks for such a thoughtful message and hug.

Eileen Manassian February 22, 2017 at 8:38 PM My heart aches....Richard. What can I write. My mind can't find the words. One of your absolute best writes, Richard. The way you brought this tragedy to light is superb...There is a better day coming for all the Eddys in the world. Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2017 at 11:56 PM I agree. Hugs Rick.

Charlie Smith February 22, 2017 at 8:38 PM Wow! Powerful, hard to read and be uneffected... Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2017 at 9:27 AM Thanks Charlie.

Jan Allison February 22, 2017 at 3:34 PM Such a sad story Richard it brought tears to my eyes:-( hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie February 22, 2017 at 1:15 PM Such a tragic, sad story beautifully written with truth, heart and great care.:-) It is a travesty when children are to bear the burdens of a parent and have to fight their way to find a place of love and peace which is sadly, foreign to them. A remarkable piece of writing :-) blessings, lynn

Daniel Turner February 22, 2017 at 10:19 AM It happens way too often, Richard. Sad story but very well written. Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2017 at 10:52 AM Thanks for being the first to comment. Much appreciated Daniel.