Echoes of the Silent Shore

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3/5/2025 for Echoes of the Silent Shore Poetry Contest sponsored by Mystic Rose Rose

Yesterday, a glint in Father's eye, unborn, my life journey's start, is nigh. Today, it's all unknown. Bright lights in the delivery room will replace the calm of Mother's womb. but babies are born like flowers bloom, and I'll be on my own. Soon, I'll grow up to be a man. I'm not sure how, don't know if I can. I feel like I'm alone. Placing cards in bicycle spokes, I can't talk about it with my folks, but acorns grow into mighty oaks. Soon, I'll do it on my own. Am I ready yet to take a wife - to make a commitment for life? I've got feet of ice. Though she had me from the first hello, can we be happy, I just don't know - but, together, oak and ivy grow, and we'll make something nice. Do I know how to be a dad, more involved than the one I had? Am prepared for what's in store? Can I stay up all night and hear him cry? or answer one hundred questions "why?" But an eagle teaches his chick to fly, and soon my heart will soar. Like everyone's, my life must end. It's more than I can comprehend. Is it like walking through a door? I guess I don't know; I'm pretty dumb. If it's like sailing from a seashore, mum, I'll loudly break a bottle of rum to echo the silent shore.

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/11/2025 10:42:00 PM

Very thought provoking poem, David, congratulations:)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 3/9/2025 8:18:00 AM

Wonderful poem. Congratulations and God bless you. love, Gina

David Crandall
Date: 3/9/2025 1:25:00 PM

Thank you so much Gina!

Ink Empress

Date: 3/6/2025 5:12:00 AM

Dear david what a sincere poem this is, sometimes time just flies, and i think many men can resonate with these emotions youv expressed altho they often dont, as society expects them to be tough. You wrote a very deep take on the prompt. Depicting uncertainties and unknown of tomorrow so well! Pleasure reading you today. Best wishes . Sending you light always

David Crandall
Date: 3/6/2025 12:24:00 PM

Thanks Ink Empress. Yep, I've often felt trepedation when approaching big changes. One thing about these life transitions I've noticed - whether you're ready are not, they always arrive. :-)

Vanya Evangeline

Date: 3/5/2025 8:06:00 PM

This is a brilliant piece, David. You paint such a vividly melancholic journey. Life's full of uncertainties but sometimes we just have to take a step forward and face whatever lies ahead, both good and bad.

David Crandall
Date: 3/5/2025 8:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Vanya!

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/5/2025 5:56:00 PM

David, your great poem delves into the stages of life, highlighting its ambiguities and responsibilities. It explores the journey from birth to adulthood, the challenges of relationships, the worries of motherhood, and the reality of mortality. Throughout life's transitions, you experience excitement, anxiety, and hope.

David Crandall
Date: 3/5/2025 7:01:00 PM

Thanks for your comments and the read, Sotto poet!