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Echoes of the Heart Collaboration With Jeannie Minor

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Thanks again to Jeannie Minor. We're not exactly sure what kind of poem this is. The way it was constructed, was I sent here two verses and she put her lines between my lines,as if to echo my thoughts with her thoughts. We hope you can figure it out and enjoy it. Peace my friends:)

To speak the unspeakable
           Will I ever get to tell you
The truth will set you free
           How much you mean to me
To think the unthinkable
           Just to think about you 
A you and me fantasy
            Sets my spirit free
To hear the unhearable
            I long to whisper softly
Words not meant for me
            The softest "I love you"
To touch the untouchable
        hunger for your soft caress
Unknown ecstasy
            That says you love me too  
To want the unattainable
           you don't belong to me 
Trying to succeed
          But know I'm always here 
To restrain the unrestrainable
          Fighting to respect the vows
Walls internally
              Of virtue held so dear
To dream the undreamable
               It's not reality
Stretching boundaries
             But hope will keep me strong
To foresee the unforeseeable
             Until the day I find myself
A date with destiny
             With you, where I belong

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Tim Smith

Date: 3/22/2016 7:03:00 PM

It is almost 3 poems in one Jeannie and DT. I loved the way you guys weaved in the response to each line.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 7:05:00 PM

Thanks, Tim. That was her brilliant idea. I'm not that smart. LOL peace my friend:):)

Jill Spagnola

Date: 3/22/2016 6:46:00 PM

What a beautiful collaboration..it reads as if you were physically sitting side by side, whispering into each other's ear, dialectically...peace to you two :), jill

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 7:01:00 PM

No it was all done by email. This is our third one, so we're getting to know what to expect. Just friends. Thank you for the lovely comments and for making me smile:) Peace my dear friend:):)

Lin Lane

Date: 3/22/2016 4:28:00 PM

Very interesting construction and it works quite well...a poetic conversation.

Lin Lane
Date: 3/22/2016 4:40:00 PM

Verse would work.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 4:30:00 PM

Yes. It was her idea. I thought it turned out pretty good. Do you know what kind of poem you would call this? Dialogue is not a choice!

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/22/2016 4:02:00 PM

Great collaborative effort poets.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/22/2016 4:03:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie. I thought it was pretty cool! Lots of fun. Peace my friend:)