Echo of your Heartbeat

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the first song I ever heard was not listened to with ears the rhythmic beat of your heart was the melody I danced to… …the whoosh of life blood, my lullaby my heart learned the harmony rejoicing in our sweet duet I still hear the echo of that maternal music the natural tempo has been bastardized mutilated by machinery the nerve splitting beeps that slowed and then stopped /\/\/\/\/\/\/ \ /\ /\ /\ /\ /\______________________ my heart mourns and aches with the loss the dance partner and teacher I love now, stuttering and insecure, my heart wants the confidence of your harmony but you taught me to sing, and now that I teach the beat to my child, the echo of your heart song will never die. ________/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\

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Tom Woody

Date: 6/11/2025 7:52:00 AM

Beautifully sad poem. Sorry for your loss. My wife lost hers in February and still mourns every Tuesday (the day she died). I like how you used the cardio lines to illustrate finality and yet not finality since we will see them again. Glad you and your daughter are close

Crystol Woods
Date: 6/11/2025 8:07:00 AM

Oh no... the loss of a parent at any age is one of our most heartbreaking trials in life. Please tell your wife I'm sending her hugs and prayers. My mom passed away when I was 24, after a long illness, brain cancer, which slowly stole her from us over about 10 years. It was a devastating time in my life... so much going on. I'm so glad to have had faith to get through it. I still miss her everyday. Thanks for commenting! Xoxo