Echo From The Heart

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Constance La France's Echo, Enduring, Empty Contest...13 Jun 2025

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New moon vanishes into a blush of russet where humid air twirls along with clouds, and stars burst… flickering above hilltops to cast my anguish across the sky: How wanton gulls crisscross on a flight; their shrill rattling an echo that my heart pales from an image of first passion’s gaieties outlined by his maze of treachery, of ruse : Forgetting not my lesions from one August night, tears split forth in torment without measure: Naïve at eighteen then, I drank yesteryear’s pain hoping fate could heal me from such drilling spin... then to wake up fed with grace to echo new morn's canticle of beginnings.

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John Hamilton

Date: 6/14/2025 6:46:00 PM

Very touching write a worthy winner Nette

Maria Williams

Date: 6/13/2025 11:28:00 PM

Dear Nette, this is stunning—so raw and haunting, yet somehow hopeful at the edges. I felt every flicker of pain and every twist of memory, like watching a storm roll in under a starlit sky. That line “outlined by his maze of treachery”—oof, what a gut-punch! And the contrast between that youthful vulnerability and the quiet resilience at the end? Best of luck in the contest...Hugs

Len Gasun

Date: 6/13/2025 7:04:00 PM

A breathtaking masterpiece as always my dear poet sis Nette! Always a pleasure and great moment to read your poetry. Always big thanks for sharing! God bless you always! Hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/13/2025 3:57:00 PM

The night is full of tears; dawn brings redemption. Aye, it was and is ever so. So poetically captured, Nette. ~ Dawn's destiny

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/13/2025 10:32:00 AM

Hi, Nette... it's been a long time. How are you? I've forgotten how amazing your poems are. What a wonderful write, every now and then i find my self stuck in my youth memories, I love the way the Echoes around the moon gives insomniac moments. Enjoyed... Always ~Linda~

Hiya Sharma

Date: 6/13/2025 3:21:00 AM

Oh, this is so deep, whispering some vulnerable and fragile emotions, dear Nette. I love how you've woven the imagery here ever so seamlessly and made it evocative with your heartfelt descriptions... I especially felt these lines in my soul "New moon vanishes into a blush of russet", "and stars burst… flickering above hilltops to cast my anguish across the sky", "Naïve at eighteen then, I drank yesteryear’s pain" So achingly beautiful... brilliantly inked!

Paige Hind

Date: 6/12/2025 7:34:00 PM

This is very beautiful. "Anguish across the skies" "drilling spin..."