Dying Bit By Bit Inside

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                   Image result for grandpa and girl laughing

When stars orange no longer mark Their glitter in a nearby park And crescent moon hides its face I grasp memories to retrace His laughter with those twinkled winks Tuneful the voice O my heart blinks: Giggling 'neath lamp posts... yet I know Words now silenced by drools so low That often I watch him every morn; As Grandpa lies hushed, forlorn While day recedes along clouds gray His mind lost as if sighs betray A glimpse blank, a flight to nowhere-- I die inside snared...life's unfair! Is this a curse for the next years Assaulting our joy, pierced by tears? The music calls; how bit by bit My breaths entrapped in a pit... How then I dread what I might find If gabs not in frolics enshrined. Contest sponsored by Silent One I Died A Little Inside 2/09/2019

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Date: 3/11/2019 9:49:00 AM
Oh, Nette! I just lost my best friend to alztheimers in October, but I had been missing her for about 3 years. Thank you for putting this kind of sorrow to words.
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Date: 2/13/2019 7:18:00 PM
So tender, so poignant, nette. Can I stop crying now? This was SO real to me; I was right there with you, every line. Many congrats on your win. This is an absolute FAVE for me! :) gw
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Date: 2/12/2019 8:17:00 AM
Beautifully written, Nette. It is so hard not to feel sadness at the loss of a beloved person's memory...changes which occur beyond our control. I wonder what the benefits of old age are supposed to be!! Hugs // paul
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Date: 2/11/2019 8:06:00 AM
So sad when the memory starts to go...Congrats on your win Nette..
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Date: 2/10/2019 11:50:00 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Nette :) - Have a lovely new week - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/10/2019 11:00:00 PM
I am also dying a bit every day... Congratulations.
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Date: 2/10/2019 8:56:00 PM
So beautifully expressed is this sad heartache at the affliction old age brings and the feeling of helplessness when a beloved family member goes through such a slow degradation of their health and oft their memory/outgoing character. Wonderfully composed and the sadness looms large to the reader. A fav my friend..
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Date: 2/10/2019 5:44:00 PM
oh congrats on the win . too
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Date: 2/10/2019 5:44:00 PM
Yes when those we love forget , bit by bit, we die a little inside, you wrote a heart felt tender poem that many can relate too. Gl in the contest Nette, hope you get a well deserved win xo
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Date: 2/10/2019 4:22:00 PM
This is so sad, especially for those who are close to their grandparents.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 2/10/2019 11:40:00 AM
It's hard when a grandparent no longer seems themselves. When my grandma passed away the "real grandma" came back to me in so many years of memories. My thoughts are with you!
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Date: 2/10/2019 7:49:00 AM
That photo speaks of your poem so eloquently. I felt the emotions of your poem..well written, as always, Nette. A sure win.
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Date: 2/10/2019 6:59:00 AM
Your words flow like magic Nette!
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Date: 2/10/2019 6:19:00 AM
So sad that as we age problems surface and we become a pale image of what we once were. Well written Nette and good luck. Tom.
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