Nette Onclaud Poet Couplet

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Dying Bit By Bit Inside

When stars orange no longer mark
Their glitter in a nearby park 
And crescent moon hides its face
I grasp memories to retrace 
His laughter with those twinkled  winks 
Tuneful the voice O my heart blinks:

Giggling 'neath lamp posts... yet I know
Words now silenced by drools so low
That often I watch him every morn;
As Grandpa lies hushed, forlorn
While day recedes along clouds gray 
His mind lost as if sighs betray
A glimpse blank, a flight to nowhere--
I die inside snared...life's unfair!

Is this a curse for the next years
Assaulting our joy, pierced by tears?

The music calls; how bit by bit
My breaths entrapped in a pit...
How then I dread what I might find
If gabs not in frolics enshrined.



Contest sponsored by Silent One
I Died A Little Inside   2/09/2019

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Sunlite Wanter March 11, 2019 at 9:49 AM Oh, Nette! I just lost my best friend to alztheimers in October, but I had been missing her for about 3 years. Thank you for putting this kind of sorrow to words.

Gershon Wolf February 13, 2019 at 7:18 PM So tender, so poignant, nette. Can I stop crying now? This was SO real to me; I was right there with you, every line. Many congrats on your win. This is an absolute FAVE for me! :) gw

Paul Callus February 12, 2019 at 8:17 AM Beautifully written, Nette. It is so hard not to feel sadness at the loss of a beloved person's memory...changes which occur beyond our control. I wonder what the benefits of old age are supposed to be!! Hugs // paul

Joseph May February 11, 2019 at 8:06 AM So sad when the memory starts to go...Congrats on your win Nette..

Anne-Lise Andresen February 10, 2019 at 11:50 PM - Congratulations on your winning poem, Nette :) - Have a lovely new week - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Pashang Salehi February 10, 2019 at 11:00 PM I am also dying a bit every day... Congratulations.

Robert Lindley February 10, 2019 at 8:56 PM So beautifully expressed is this sad heartache at the affliction old age brings and the feeling of helplessness when a beloved family member goes through such a slow degradation of their health and oft their memory/outgoing character. Wonderfully composed and the sadness looms large to the reader. A fav my friend..

Mystic Rose Rose February 10, 2019 at 5:44 PM oh congrats on the win . too

Mystic Rose Rose February 10, 2019 at 5:44 PM Yes when those we love forget , bit by bit, we die a little inside, you wrote a heart felt tender poem that many can relate too. Gl in the contest Nette, hope you get a well deserved win xo

Silent One February 10, 2019 at 4:22 PM This is so sad, especially for those who are close to their grandparents.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Kim Rodrigues February 10, 2019 at 11:40 AM It's hard when a grandparent no longer seems themselves. When my grandma passed away the "real grandma" came back to me in so many years of memories. My thoughts are with you!

Vijay Pandit February 10, 2019 at 7:49 AM That photo speaks of your poem so eloquently. I felt the emotions of your poem..well written, as always, Nette. A sure win.

Bobby May February 10, 2019 at 6:59 AM Your words flow like magic Nette!

Tom Cunningham February 10, 2019 at 6:19 AM So sad that as we age problems surface and we become a pale image of what we once were. Well written Nette and good luck. Tom.