Dry Run

What could have happened? They wondered and said What could have happened Inside of his head? I’ll tell you what I think The guy flipped his lid Must have been on the brink To do what he did But the guy seemed so happy I know what you mean Guess things were crappy Or so it would seem In such circumstances We’re all lost for words The guy took his chances And he’s for the birds Could anyone have guessed? They all ponder now The poor guy obsessed Could have helped him somehow? I see what you mean He was obviously drawn Surely someone had seen The signs coming on? I suppose in the end Not much could be done Like this poem that I’ve penned Another dry run!

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Audrey Haick

Date: 5/3/2010 8:23:00 AM

Great Rhyme, David but your work is never a "dry-run"!! You are one of PS very unique poets..You are a Poet!! Thanks for leaving comments on my peom..Peace, Audrey

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 5/3/2010 6:49:00 AM

giggles@@good write!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/2/2010 7:11:00 PM

Nonsense.. your poems are unique David just like u hon... that last line is cool though... the rhyme gets me every time.. thankxxx for enjoying my ooem about my MOM... for a new contest... u should enter them too... your work is excellent...luv.. from the "Sweetheart"

Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/2/2010 10:29:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your rhyme today, David...Thank you for your comment and have a nice week...Gert

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/2/2010 4:32:00 AM

I got a chuckle so it wasn't a dry run for they say laughter is the best medicine so maybe you helped me heal some cell today..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara

James Marshall Goff

Date: 5/1/2010 11:15:00 PM

nice rhyme! David! I just watched the movie "Tombstone" for the 10th. time...this poem fits...jimbo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/1/2010 9:58:00 PM

Reminded me of one I really like about a guy who takes a gun and shoots himself in the head. Oh , I think it was called Cory or something like that (he "shimmered when he walked") An enjoyable read. LUv, Andrea

Kim Hilliker

Date: 5/1/2010 9:20:00 PM

Nice rhyme and pattern. Thanks for sharing.

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 5/1/2010 7:41:00 PM

Great quatrain, David! It's no dry run to me, but it is a pecular matter indeed. Could it have been prevented? Perhaps if someone had cared. Leaving home at 16, seems to me, an escape. Escape from what? Even so, there is no justification for murder. It is a crazy world out there though, some serious disturbances, to be sure.