Drowning In Fluidity

What are these thoughts going through my head
Conversations with an unknown voice
On what path will my body be led?

I feel helpless like I have no choice
I can't distinguish reality
Conversations with an unknown voice

With pills I lose creativity
Which way is better I do not know
I can't distinguish reality

I am vibrating from head to toe
Hanging on with a tentative grip
Which way is better I do not know

My mind like fluid, starting to slip
Is this how it feels to go insane?
Hanging on with a tentative grip

I can't see the light I'm lost in pain
Is this how it feels to go insane?
What are these thoughts going through my head
On what path will my body be led?

I wrote this to bring light to people in our society who suffer from  Schizoprinia. 
I volunteer with homeless people and some refuse treatment because they 
find the numbness worse than the affliction.  A good movie that deals with
this topic is "A Beautiful Mind"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 1/26/2015 3:03:00 PM
I watched a Beautiful Mind and was blown away. What a movie...what a story. This was good to read again, Richard. You missed one of my poems today. I hope all I well...or are you feeling disconnected. Take care....
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Date: 1/28/2014 6:25:00 AM
Oh Richard......how did I miss this???? My heart is in pain....I feel.....sometimes.....like going on it too hard...Tears are falling. Bless you for reaching out....Though this is not my cross...Depression is taking a toll on my soul....I needed to read some of your writes today for solace....Thank you...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/28/2014 7:00:00 AM
I am so sorry to hear that Eileen, have you gone to your doctor? It is important to seek help. Hugs Rick.
Date: 2/14/2013 8:34:00 PM
Richard, Stopping by with sincere thanks for your kind comments. It is appreciated more than words or can say... Wishing you the best Valentine's Day YET! Always & Forever :-) LINDA
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Date: 2/14/2013 9:24:00 PM
I hope you are having an ausome valentines as well.
Date: 1/16/2013 12:49:00 PM
I love this piece , Richard. Great write. It is a heartbreaking thing to watch someone like that, , its all just a hair line difference , I feel. And the movie 'A Beautiful Mind ' is one of my favorites. There's a book on that too. The life of a mathematician in illusions....thanks for sharing....
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Date: 1/16/2013 1:36:00 PM
Thanks Mehnaz, I so appreciate your comment.
Date: 1/16/2013 11:45:00 AM
It's a balancing act that is hard to find.... can't imagine. You've brought a ray of light for my mind into your poetry. Enjoyed the read !!
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Date: 1/16/2013 8:52:00 AM
Richard any mental illness is a dreadful thing to watch happen to anyone...David
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/16/2013 8:54:00 AM
I fully agree David. Unfortunately people are afraid to talk about it. So many suffer in silence.
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