Trina Layne Poet Rhyme

Notes About The Poem

Quote: When the well is dry, we will know the worth of water. Benjamin Franklin

Premiere Contest - As the Last Petal Falls

Sponsor: Sara Jama

Judged: 4th March, 2025

3rd Place 

Drought

Dry skies scorch the earth, and skin shrinks to bone.
Heat sticks on teeth like obstinate plaque.
When nature's passive aggressions attack,                     
silenced rain ~ ruins seeds ~ yields beds of stone.

Misty eyes melt quickly ~ tears are prone. 
It's all straw, opines the widow with a wilted back. 
Dry skies scorch the earth, and skin shrinks to bone.
Heat sticks on teeth like obstinate plaque.

Dogs die, crops rot, cats run hot, cows moan. 
Sorrows rise with the sun also ~ too bright is black. 
Wilted widow folds at the knees for her abysmal lack.
Palms locked, cradling the final petal she will own.
Dry skies scorch the earth, and skin shrinks to bone.

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Susan Ashley March 6, 2025 at 11:42 AM Dear Trina, your dark sensory imagery is deep, rich, viscerally felt and enhanced by your use of repetition. Also, your use of assonance and alliteration is subtle yet splendid. Love the BF quote too. Congratulations for your success in Sara's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Susan Ashley March 6, 2025 at 12:43 PM Yes, definitely. Your poem brings this important issue into sharp focus.. but does it so poetically. Trina Layne March 6, 2025 at 12:02 PM Appreciated Susan. I live in a water-scarce country. We need to be more mindful of how we use it.

Sara Jama March 6, 2025 at 6:26 AM Thank you writing on my prompt and congratulations on placing. I love the imagery and depth in your write. Absolute fantastic lines, "Dry skies scorch the earth, and skin shrinks to bone." This is my favourite. Again thank you for writing. Hope to see you write in future contests. Trina Layne March 6, 2025 at 12:00 PM Many thanks. It was a great prompt. I am happy that I responded. I plan to enter again at another time.