Eileen Manassian Poet Monorhyme

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Drifting Away

you are drifting away
   little more every day
      farther along the way
                Not aware that you stray
                     I don't know what to say
                                How I want you to stay

                                       But you are slowly
                                                     EVER      SO    S  L O W L Y

                                                                           just
                                                                                drifting
                                                                                    A~~W~~A~~Y

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Laura Breidenthal January 1, 2016 at 10:26 PM Yeah, that slow drift can be painful, especially if the one drifting is the one we care about and love... I love the form of this poem - very nicely executed, Eileen. Always, Laura

Samiha Zubair August 15, 2015 at 3:53 PM The slow motion, as if scaling the departure it is indeed beautifully penned down Eileen Manassian August 15, 2015 at 4:09 PM Thank you, Smiha for your comment. It is much appreciated.

Richard D Seal August 7, 2015 at 6:35 PM Maybe you should find the words to say my little Desert Orchid. BTW, have you noticed the grammar mistake in the big block of writing at the top? Take care, Richard Eileen Manassian August 7, 2015 at 10:30 PM Thank you, Mr Seal. I had not noticed that. Thanks for keeping an eye out for me. Much appreciated.

Bl Devnath August 7, 2015 at 2:05 PM Filled with heartfelt passion. beautifully crafted with beautiful words. 7 i feel. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl Eileen Manassian August 7, 2015 at 10:34 PM Thank you, BL. Friends are really important to me. :) I appreciate your visit, dear.

Alexis Y. August 7, 2015 at 10:51 AM Great poem, Eileen; relationships can be so difficult nevertheless we must cherish them. Thanks for sharing:-) Alexis P.S. l liked the form it worked with the message of the poem. 7 Eileen Manassian August 7, 2015 at 10:53 AM Thanks, sweetie. You are always such a support to me. I'll be by to visit soon. I'm a little down at the moment. Hugs

Paul Callus August 7, 2015 at 10:21 AM Lovely poem, Eileen; a varied discussion could evolve out of its simplicity. As starters.....perhaps just looking for a bit of space...confinement could smother a good relationship! ~~~ an after thought....some keep their balloon on a string...:) Hugs // paul Eileen Manassian August 7, 2015 at 10:55 AM I understand this all too well, Paul. I changed the photo of the girl with the balloon. I don't know...This pic spoke to me more. Thanks for the visit. Sometimes it's good to have people come and look for you. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux August 7, 2015 at 10:10 AM sometimes we mistake going with the flow as drifting but the other person is making sure they are not too far away. Eileen Manassian August 7, 2015 at 10:48 AM Richard....you were in my mind when I wrote this. You don't usually miss reading my work, and I've missed ya!!! Thanks for the visit....You seem very busy lately. I can understand with your blog and work and family....Just don't drift too far away from Poetry Soup!!!

Bill Lindsay August 7, 2015 at 9:59 AM Love the 'Banksy' but loving the shape even more; this is an area that I'm also experimenting with ... must read more of you ;) Eileen Manassian August 7, 2015 at 10:48 AM Thanks for the visit, Bill. Much appreciated. Hope you find my writes of interest.