David William Breidenthal Poet Rhyme

Drenched In Silence

Unbearable thoughts barreling through my head
Decaying in this silent chamber...
Where I desperately cry for help

Words come out useless...I have no capability to yelp
They haven't collapsed in the hands of the unforgiving jail-keeper
This pain grows in my bones...making me weaker
No one bothers to consider me
Circulated by envious glory
That snicker at my carrion body as it drops in dripping failures
Dragged by the sickening thought of living with jailers
As if i had no outlook to life...

I'm still placed in this cold-heartened chamber
Because I'm drenched in silence...
haunted by the deafening atmosphere 
sensing a load of terrorized fear

Shame embraced me, never leaving my presence
Cautious of the hovering thoughts,
transforming itself into my dreadful, panicky past

This hopelessness doesn't seem to matter
In this chamber of deceitfulness

Someday...hopefully Someday...
This silent chamber will shatter 

For now,  I'll abide in this loathsome,
silent chamber 
Until God, My  Savior, will shatter this wretched place
Into smithereens

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Skat A December 19, 2015 at 7:04 PM JWE.,:) Congratulations on having your poem featured on the soups Home Page. I'm also sending an early Christmas Message with Hugs. May you have a blessed Christmas and a happy New Year.. Good luck in all you do, just in case I don't stop a second time before the 2015 ends ~SKAT LOVE~

Jake Ponce May 4, 2014 at 6:51 AM Okay so this one's first on the list. Whatever were you going through at the time you wrote this? I sure hope everything's behind you now. Even if this is an awesome dark piece, nobody deserves to feel so much pain.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire April 5, 2013 at 4:05 PM Dear David,Hope this finds YOU and YOURS Healthy and High in the Spirit. A friend of Edgar's?? Very well written Dark POETRY, it must run in the family.Vivid Imagery Superb Pen. With LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry

Laura Breidenthal November 4, 2012 at 1:18 AM Awesome piece. Love rereading your work. Your mind is awesome. And lovely worded. I will continue reading over your old stuff you showed me. And commenting. I've gottah get to some of your new stuff too! Always, Laura

Jslambert Mister Roboto June 19, 2011 at 5:41 AM "my carrion body as it drops in dripping failures"--Cooler than a polar bears toenails...oh hellyeah! Nicely souped up lines! David William Breidenthal May 22, 2012 at 5:16 PM haha okkkkay then! XD thanks!

Wilma Neels July 10, 2010 at 10:12 PM Sometimes silence, can be deafening. Enjoyed your write this morning, rgds Wilma David William Breidenthal May 22, 2012 at 5:17 PM :P Oh yeah. lol My sister made lyrics outtah this song. The song vs. is way better than this vs. xD Thanks anyway.